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Hard Day
What will you have?
I just wanna drink.
That's why I'm asking you
Just give me something I don't want to think
That's not how this goes
Alright let me think for one moment
Take all the time you need
I guess I'll do this in installments
Give me a Daiquiri
Better yet make that a Manhattan
You went from soft and then hard
Are you sure you know what you're havin’?
OK give me a Penicillin
straight on ice
Better yet give me a Gin and tonic
with no ice
Make up your mind I don't have all night
Ok, ok I don’t want to fight
Give me the strongest cocktail here tonight
Blood and Sand?
Yea that sounds right.
I just wanna drink.
That's why I'm asking you
Just give me something I don't want to think
That's not how this goes
Alright let me think for one moment
Take all the time you need
I guess I'll do this in installments
Give me a Daiquiri
Better yet make that a Manhattan
You went from soft and then hard
Are you sure you know what you're havin’?
OK give me a Penicillin
straight on ice
Better yet give me a Gin and tonic
with no ice
Make up your mind I don't have all night
Ok, ok I don’t want to fight
Give me the strongest cocktail here tonight
Blood and Sand?
Yea that sounds right.
Written by
fianaturie8
(Fia Naturie)
Published 1st Jul 2024
Author's Note
This is for the cocktail competition
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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2nd Jul 2024 00:14am
This has a line 'em up feel to it. Been that kinda couple weeks here. If only I had a Lemon Drop or Fruity Pebble on hand! Good luck in the comp!
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2nd Jul 2024 1:45am
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2nd Jul 2024 12:57pm
I enjoyed this, Fia.
I agree with my esteemed fellow poets, your talent is endless. Good luck in the comp.
I agree with my esteemed fellow poets, your talent is endless. Good luck in the comp.
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2nd Jul 2024 1:58pm
So happy you entered my comp * I honestly was hoping you would :-)
And what an excellent piece this is, amazing build up too.
And what an excellent piece this is, amazing build up too.
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3rd Jul 2024 10:43pm
I like these sort of poems, Fia, even though it sounds brutal & reads like torture (to me) but also... let's clean it all up afterwards, lol. I say that because the sand will soak up the blood. 😊
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3rd Jul 2024 11:33pm