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uncovered
The slump of
your shoulders
foreshadows the
way the night softly
covers our feet
like a blanket
filled with holes
in peak winter
I want to cover
you as softly as
this night,
and etch
the sheetprints
of my skin
on yours
I want to shiver
as my hands find
home against
your chest
with midnight’s
sparse remains
forgotten
on
the floor
and I want
to be the breath
that warms
yours
as tomorrow
picks at our
naked edges
your shoulders
foreshadows the
way the night softly
covers our feet
like a blanket
filled with holes
in peak winter
I want to cover
you as softly as
this night,
and etch
the sheetprints
of my skin
on yours
I want to shiver
as my hands find
home against
your chest
with midnight’s
sparse remains
forgotten
on
the floor
and I want
to be the breath
that warms
yours
as tomorrow
picks at our
naked edges
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9th May 2024 5:14pm
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9th May 2024 6:15pm
Thank you D-Bear. You are a Queen of sensuality so I consider this a big compliment!
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9th May 2024 6:54pm
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9th May 2024 6:05pm
I was totally captivated.
Sexy, sensual, soft yet still sharp in all the right places.
Smiling for you over here.
Sexy, sensual, soft yet still sharp in all the right places.
Smiling for you over here.
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Thank you my sweet friend.
Tolkien writes that the road goes ever on. And it does. Never the way I expect it.
Tolkien writes that the road goes ever on. And it does. Never the way I expect it.
Re. uncovered
9th May 2024 7:11pm
The way your mind moves...the way you articulate thoughts & emotions...I am blown away.
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9th May 2024 9:33pm
My mind? Pffft. My mind is a meth-hamster.
But I know what you mean. Thank you my friend
But I know what you mean. Thank you my friend
Re. uncovered
9th May 2024 7:20pm
Tight piece of writing her Lady, you always bring it with each and every writing.
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9th May 2024 9:34pm
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9th May 2024 9:39pm
A rare write for you ..
Refreshing.
So much so it reminds of a wet wipe they used to give you in restaurants after eating certain kinds of food. Can't remember what kind of food however.
How's that for a weird re-reply ?
Refreshing.
So much so it reminds of a wet wipe they used to give you in restaurants after eating certain kinds of food. Can't remember what kind of food however.
How's that for a weird re-reply ?
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Re: Re. uncovered
9th May 2024 9:49pm
I’m a wet wipe! Omg! Ahahahahhahaaa!!!!! Getting barbecued chicken off your hands?! Yes. Fuck yes! I love it.
That was actually kind and I appreciate you.
You know, I’m not all “fuck every hole then break
my heart while I stab you”
Hm. No. Wait. I mostly am.
Big like!
That was actually kind and I appreciate you.
You know, I’m not all “fuck every hole then break
my heart while I stab you”
Hm. No. Wait. I mostly am.
Big like!
Re: Re. uncovered
9th May 2024 10:04pm
I always kinda know what I can say to you that I wouldn't say to others. I appreciate that connection..
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9th May 2024 11:15pm
Oh wow… this is amazing… sensual and very descriptive… I love it.
Can I say more than that?!!
If I say more I’m afraid to loose my breath that warms yours as tomorrow picks at our naked edges
Can I say more than that?!!
If I say more I’m afraid to loose my breath that warms yours as tomorrow picks at our naked edges
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Re: Re. uncovered
10th May 2024 2:03am
Dude it's an open comment, you can say anything you want.
That was sweet, and I appreciate it. Don't hold your breath 'k?
That was sweet, and I appreciate it. Don't hold your breath 'k?
Re. uncovered
9th May 2024 11:55pm
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10th May 2024 2:04am
Fuck you're the most understated brilliance here, and you always have been my friend.
Yes. The mutual vulnerability.
You're a fucking ninja.
Yes. The mutual vulnerability.
You're a fucking ninja.
Re: Re. uncovered
10th May 2024 12:47pm
Just trying to honor your double jointed tongue Kung fu, my sweet friend.
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10th May 2024 1:50pm
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10th May 2024 00:53am
In the wander of need cover me till night shall fade as love to you awakes. There upon the verge of whispered dreams 'neath the caressing coverlet of your soul, let our truth speak before the dawn...such thoughts as these your words evoke.
I love the glimpse of this side of you 🌼
I love the glimpse of this side of you 🌼
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Re: Re. uncovered
10th May 2024 2:09am
Holy shit. Your comment is better than my fucking poem.
The King of Romantic Shiz likes it? Huh. Maybe it doesn't suck.
And don't let it get around that I can romantic. It'll ruin my reputation as a whore with a chainsaw fetish. I worked hard for that reputation.
Thanks, AJ. Mean it.
The King of Romantic Shiz likes it? Huh. Maybe it doesn't suck.
And don't let it get around that I can romantic. It'll ruin my reputation as a whore with a chainsaw fetish. I worked hard for that reputation.
Thanks, AJ. Mean it.
Re: Re. uncovered
10th May 2024 5:26pm
Just stealing a little of your lime light so I can bask in you reflected glory is all 😇
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Re. uncovered
10th May 2024 3:16am
Awesome piece Betty. I definitely enjoy seeing the different sides of your poetry.
LJ
LJ
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Re. uncovered
11th May 2024 10:23pm
Okay, who is this person that jacked Betty's page?!
(Hey, cool; a Betty Page reference for free!)
I could tell you how beautiful this write is. And how I'm kinda awed by it, the tender side that you usually forego, for a more "spirited" outcome. But I'm not going to write those things. Nope.
Rather, I'm just going to smile to myself and say I knew it. She isn't lost within the rage just yet.
Hey, this is beauti- awesome. It's good to see.
(Hey, cool; a Betty Page reference for free!)
I could tell you how beautiful this write is. And how I'm kinda awed by it, the tender side that you usually forego, for a more "spirited" outcome. But I'm not going to write those things. Nope.
Rather, I'm just going to smile to myself and say I knew it. She isn't lost within the rage just yet.
Hey, this is beauti- awesome. It's good to see.
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11th May 2024 10:26pm
YAAS! FREE Betty Page shit! I'm in!
I'm glad you didn't go with those things because I would have totally denied EVERYTHING. I don't have a soft side. And if I did, I'm sure some dickhead would come along stab me every time I showed it.
So I'd never show it. Ever. Because it doesn't exist.
Good of you to not notice!
Oh, my bro-man, I feel like there's more rage now than ever. It's just simmering differently. Low heat, long burn.