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The Summit
Caution
as he ascends
high into
the clouds.
With
no more
climbers
allowed,
he’s taking
his time
reaching
the highest
peak.
He loves
splashing
in the stream,
enjoying
the magic
mountain
mystique.
as he ascends
high into
the clouds.
With
no more
climbers
allowed,
he’s taking
his time
reaching
the highest
peak.
He loves
splashing
in the stream,
enjoying
the magic
mountain
mystique.
Published 7th May 2024
Author's Note
Magic mountain for the Karma Sutra Me competition.
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7th May 2024 11:01am
splashing in the stream?!? I haven’t heard anyone call that a splashing in the stream.. are you a … don’t answer that .. I’m already in deep water here … I like this… good luck with the competition
7th May 2024 11:05am
7th May 2024 3:43pm
8th May 2024 9:26am
7th May 2024 5:29pm
Hoi hoi
No matter what they say, I think this is a tender kinda poem.
And I like to float on its …. Ah, the language is leaving me.
And I’ve enjoyed it very much.
A hats off to Her’s Poem Me? I hope so.
Kind regards, Gus
No matter what they say, I think this is a tender kinda poem.
And I like to float on its …. Ah, the language is leaving me.
And I’ve enjoyed it very much.
A hats off to Her’s Poem Me? I hope so.
Kind regards, Gus
8th May 2024 9:27am
10th May 2024 4:12am
When it's splashing, you know it's 'magic'... I like the imagery. Good luck in the contest!
10th May 2024 4:20am
12th Jun 2024 00:34am
The wording is exceptional. How clever this poem is in describing sex. Great work!
13th Jun 2024 1:08am
22nd Jun 2024 7:00am
That speaks to me of sex in context of fidelity:
With
no more
climbers
allowed,
Like the splashing around in the stream of the magic mountain too!
With
no more
climbers
allowed,
Like the splashing around in the stream of the magic mountain too!
26th Jun 2024 2:46am
