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Sweet Memory
Why can't we go back to past days?
What happened to the sweet summer rays?
When music transports us in time.
Two glasses clinking with wine.
So calm was the ocean that day.
Suntan lotion in skin marinade.
Sweet scents of coconut lime.
Sweet lips gentle and kind.
Remember that time in the woods?
When they thought you were up to no good.
It’s funny how they were so right.
Smiling about that sweet summer night.
There was another time to explore.
When you stood at my front door.
They said, “Don’t let you in.”
How could I resist that smile? That grin.
That love was so pure and drifted away.
Two islands met but could not stay.
Two lovers laid in each other’s arms.
To be placed in memory where no one can harm
What happened to the sweet summer rays?
When music transports us in time.
Two glasses clinking with wine.
So calm was the ocean that day.
Suntan lotion in skin marinade.
Sweet scents of coconut lime.
Sweet lips gentle and kind.
Remember that time in the woods?
When they thought you were up to no good.
It’s funny how they were so right.
Smiling about that sweet summer night.
There was another time to explore.
When you stood at my front door.
They said, “Don’t let you in.”
How could I resist that smile? That grin.
That love was so pure and drifted away.
Two islands met but could not stay.
Two lovers laid in each other’s arms.
To be placed in memory where no one can harm
Author's Note
This was a slow burn. With the last stanza the muse left me so if it is cut off too soon. Sorry. Will revise when it comes back.
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Re. Sweet Memory
6th May 2024 4:59pm
👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏!! Extremely nice 👌 well put 👏 together like 👍 the perfect ingredient with the precise touch of spice!!
Beautiful musing queen 👸 please 🙏 keep 👏 on writing ✍ ok 👌 peace ✌ and blessings 🙏 always 💖
Beautiful musing queen 👸 please 🙏 keep 👏 on writing ✍ ok 👌 peace ✌ and blessings 🙏 always 💖
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6th May 2024 5:26pm
Re. Sweet Memory
Anonymous
- Edited 6th May 2024 5:18pm
6th May 2024 5:00pm
I found nothing wrong with this poem, Fia. It displays a feeling of sadness for a relationship now in the past. I think we all have someone we think about from time to time.
Well done.
Well done.
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6th May 2024 5:29pm
Re. Sweet Memory
6th May 2024 5:07pm
I like it as is. Sometimes we wish that we could just linger in a certain place in time. Yet time marches ever forward. Life changes continuously. We must do our best to savor each moment. The memories are eventually all that remain. Dont create memories tainted by the regret of not appreciating the moment.
Really enjoyed this write Fia. Was thought provoking for me. Thanks for sharing.
Really enjoyed this write Fia. Was thought provoking for me. Thanks for sharing.
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6th May 2024 5:30pm
Re. Sweet Memory
6th May 2024 5:39pm
What a perfect moment when past pleasures are brought to life by present and better memories now being built...Hugs and love, 0=0, Oral
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6th May 2024 5:55pm
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7th May 2024 10:36am
I second the motion of the guys here… this a good one leave it as it is ….you can always kick your muse in the ass next time he/she gives you a hard time …. Kick him/her in the ass anyways… ok if it is a him keep him … if it’s a her send her my way… I’m stuck here as well
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