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God's Forgotten Child
you sware you would reach the stars
but then you hit the wall
a sickness, a tragedy, a poor situation
or all of the above
I remember when you thrived
always said you were the best of us
time wasn't wasted
it was taken
and the sad truth is
you were a fucking champion
yet no one will ever know it
because you had to quit
suffering within your own head
these judgmental fucks say shit
but you can't prove them wrong
you've been crippled
god's forgotten child
I see the fire raging within
how you still try
so frustrated with every failed attempt
and it just builds up
till you're completely crushed
the best of times have passed
or worse yet, trashed
the sad thing is
you want that glory back so bad
but I couldn't careless of my own
if I could trade my life for you to thrive
I would...
in any circumstance
in any timeline
in any universe
but then you hit the wall
a sickness, a tragedy, a poor situation
or all of the above
I remember when you thrived
always said you were the best of us
time wasn't wasted
it was taken
and the sad truth is
you were a fucking champion
yet no one will ever know it
because you had to quit
suffering within your own head
these judgmental fucks say shit
but you can't prove them wrong
you've been crippled
god's forgotten child
I see the fire raging within
how you still try
so frustrated with every failed attempt
and it just builds up
till you're completely crushed
the best of times have passed
or worse yet, trashed
the sad thing is
you want that glory back so bad
but I couldn't careless of my own
if I could trade my life for you to thrive
I would...
in any circumstance
in any timeline
in any universe
Published 8th Mar 2024
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8th Mar 2024 10:21am
This is a powerful poem. Really well executed and the emotion you have pours out in each and every word. Nicely done.
8th Mar 2024 11:28am
Dear DC,
Echo Vision’s comment. The energy of frustration and agitation you portray is palpable. A difficult subject on which to comment, great writing. H🌷
Echo Vision’s comment. The energy of frustration and agitation you portray is palpable. A difficult subject on which to comment, great writing. H🌷
9th Apr 2024 2:08am
Let's just say I feel this. You know my physical state and It's easy to feel like His forgotten child at times. Especially when I reflect on the old me, and the losses I've taken. I also know those selfless feelings of wanting to save someone you love from going through their own battles. It's far from a comfortable place too. With that being said, its written like the caring man with a big heart I know. 💖 & ✨, my friend.
9th Apr 2024 9:57am
Hey, friend 😁 sorry I'm not as active on here as much as I would like.
The person I wrote this about was such a inspiration to me. It was just sad to see them struggle then having people look down on them for needing help.
The person I wrote this about was such a inspiration to me. It was just sad to see them struggle then having people look down on them for needing help.
