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I'm in pain, but no one sees me.
I'm in pain, but no one cares.
I don't know what to do, what is wrong with me?
Why can't I get over it like everyone else?
My life is dissolving in front of me.
Why can't I make the decision, the only decision I want to make.
It should be easy, pill or knife?
I'm in pain, but no one cares.
I don't know what to do, what is wrong with me?
Why can't I get over it like everyone else?
My life is dissolving in front of me.
Why can't I make the decision, the only decision I want to make.
It should be easy, pill or knife?
Published 1st May 2012
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1st May 2012 2:16am
I need help for the title for this one if anyone has any idea please tell me.
Anonymous
1st May 2012 2:49am
It is too similar to the other poem I just commented on....you have not explained the circumstances that lead you to feeling that suicide was the only option or explored other ways to react to a rejection that reflects more on the person who rejected you (you are better off without them...as they are the hurting kind)
I would ask that you pretend you just got rid of a 600 pound nasty gorilla....would you not feel lighter....and less vulnerable
Think of scenarios that involve revenge...yes that is ok to THINK OF...but a waste of time to do
Think of scenarios where you excel and are now looked up to by your friends...see what that person threw away
It does not need a new title...you need to write
a new poem which honors yourself for being you
Anybody who dishonors you is not worth a poem
Kitty
....used to be a teacher
I just gave you homework
I would ask that you pretend you just got rid of a 600 pound nasty gorilla....would you not feel lighter....and less vulnerable
Think of scenarios that involve revenge...yes that is ok to THINK OF...but a waste of time to do
Think of scenarios where you excel and are now looked up to by your friends...see what that person threw away
It does not need a new title...you need to write
a new poem which honors yourself for being you
Anybody who dishonors you is not worth a poem
Kitty
....used to be a teacher
I just gave you homework
Anonymous
1st May 2012 3:12am
Damn, I should have stayed in College.
Well said, Kitty.
Are you listenning up there? :)
Well said, Kitty.
Are you listenning up there? :)
1st May 2012 3:48am
well, the person who did it is not someone i can get rid of. you see, my life got turned around july 22 last year when a massacre happened in Norway, thats where I'm from, and I lost 10 friends including my first love and best friend. It broke my heart and now the killer is finally up for trial, but instead of feeling relief of the fact that it is finally happening I feel like I'm doing my friends wrong by trying to live my life without them + one of my other close friends who felt the same way tried to cut herself last week. I was always more on ODing than cutting, but it is so hard to do.
