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Suprende' Dynamia
Will they tire of us, Dynamia,
of our love light; A comet
above this murked marble world.
As they sleep, in darkness, to dream
of a better life that eludes them,
while we are rampant under the stars.
Our skin speckled, by the glimmer
of the envious gods' eyes,
who are never sated
because they know no hunger
like within our mortal needs.
-Gods who never bleed
from a seeping heart.
Who cannot see the moon
as the last lily
in the sorrow bouquet
of an ended day
alone.
~
6:21 a.m.
Overnight, Mother Nature got intoxicated
on moon-shine, then stumbled into the morning
spilling the excess upon us.
I woke up dry-mouthed,
so I licked that milk-light
off of your shoulder
and added it to your lips.
-A tinge of salt?
From our night sweats.
Some seasoning, from reckless sprinkling;
Mother Nature gets hectic
when she drinks.
As you wake, now parched
demanding of me a kiss.
Of course, lover.
Anything you wish.
~
Will they write of us
when a love story is needed?
Will they rip up the dark tales
and repair the endings
with our own deep red momentous words?
Use us, as a spark,
when the night has no stars?
Ignite themselves into flames,
with the embers of our afterglow.
Because lover,
fire has the potential to spread
even when it's low.
The illumination of our union,
that shared light that we bask in;
Two torches, combining into a brilliance,
to get through the caverns of a dark night.
Shadows dodge upon and away from our faces,
as we reflect the antics of love.
It's the moon-shine, having its way with us.
What of the carry over, of our two awakenings;
Once for the mornings and again at night.
Where the dream-world waits, open
for us to enter with inspiration.
To give it imagery, for the vastness of scenery.
Allow the night owls to "Who?"
...
It is this, Dynamia.
It is us.
Too, this lust, these slithers of sweat
shining upon our spines.
As we seem to crack open our backs,
to allow night wings to lift us
from mortal slumber.
-We are offspring, after all,
of angel and demon.
We celebrate with our bodies, fervently,
the angst of what they once had.
~
The crescent moon acts as a talon,
slicing once, peering into our room.
Aghast, it pales in the whiteness of mock purity.
But it stares, squinted and side-eyed,
then takes an evening cloud into itself,
to blend into a swirling scene of you and I.
But it can't mimic the thrush of our flesh,
such heated reds belong to us.
As we mock the gods,
by acting like frantic animals.
The moon, that once blank screen,
repeats us, but only in black and white.
Its partner is a shy cloud,
shuffling, side to side.
Be like this, the moon shows to the world,
be like them.
-It means us.
I don't mind who sees,
but none will know our secret identities;
The intimate moments of you and me.
Filling pages, for our love story.
~
Jesus once made water into wine, yet
you do it for me all the time.
How you enter my rooms, and
a blessing precedes you
as a light .
My life knows no darkness now.
So, as you fly away
on that metal, selfish bird, today,
I will close these pages for now.
I will set the lantern to low.
Perhaps, even, I'll only eat bread
as life is again about sustainment.
Even as I close this book,
closing me
-Closing myself off to dilemmas
that encircle me,
I carry this as a tome, to ward off
life's misgivings.
I will open it, upon your return.
I will open you.
The moon will peer, and a talon or two
will shred doomed stories
that stained some days surrounding me.
Those of how I got by, with words,
until everything is recalled
in the pages of our eyes.
This page, the corner folded over,
it's like hair in my face.
Brush it aside, when you return
so we can see where we left off.
Our handfuls of embers;
Once words, kept our fire alive.
~~~
Published 29th Jan 2024
| Edited 4th Feb 2024
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It's funny what we sometimes put ourselves through for love, if you think about it, i.e, the longing, the missing, the pining, travel etc. Whatever happened to the 'girl next door' huh? I suppose love isn't always so practical on every level, that's why people follow their hearts. I used to travel by train to see a love of mine, back in the day. She lived 215 miles away. We'd meet weekends mainly, once a month. Good fun. Your poem reminded me of the separation frustration. We'd write weekly during the void though, so that was another buzz, lol. Your title sounds like a great one for a forthcoming music album... that I naturally hope you're working on! The material is excellent. 😉
31st Jan 2024 2:02am
Dude, I have zero musical talent.
And, The "girls next door" are boring.
Like this:
Me: "In my neighborhood, there's this nice lake..."
Them: "I know"
Me: "Well, there's a new restaurant that..."
Them: "I know".
I like your descriptive comment! And thanks for the kudos. It's appreciated!
And, The "girls next door" are boring.
Like this:
Me: "In my neighborhood, there's this nice lake..."
Them: "I know"
Me: "Well, there's a new restaurant that..."
Them: "I know".
I like your descriptive comment! And thanks for the kudos. It's appreciated!
31st Jan 2024 2:04am
4th Feb 2024 1:36pm
A lot of it is about the enthusiasm that people have, or not. That energy is contagious.
I am a very curious type person. Being around others who have that zeal is a win.
I am a very curious type person. Being around others who have that zeal is a win.
29th Jan 2024 2:43am
This entire poem had me captivated, but that 5th stanza…I was left breathless.
Amazing.
The two of you are beautiful together.
Amazing.
The two of you are beautiful together.
Beautiful? I am a rusty tree, who suffered through sparrows too long. Now there is a swan in my limbs. I've shed the rust.
Thank you, Mary. This write took some work! It's helter skelter for sure. But I wanted that effect. I'm glad you can appreciate the total of it.
Thank you, Mary. This write took some work! It's helter skelter for sure. But I wanted that effect. I'm glad you can appreciate the total of it.
29th Jan 2024 7:12pm
I am at a loss as to where to begin with this incredibly epic write. It just kept building upon itself & growing in depth. But this here...
"Use us, as a spark,
when the night has no stars?
Ignite themselves into flames,
with the embers of our afterglow.
Because lover,
fire has the potential to spread
even when it's low."
That's where I stopped breathing or existing & just lived through the poem. Infuckingcredible!
"Use us, as a spark,
when the night has no stars?
Ignite themselves into flames,
with the embers of our afterglow.
Because lover,
fire has the potential to spread
even when it's low."
That's where I stopped breathing or existing & just lived through the poem. Infuckingcredible!
31st Jan 2024 2:14am
Damn! I will take a "infuckingcredible" any day! Even though I just did a few small edits...lol.
It's a long one, I know. I'm guilty of that a lot! Thank you, Willow, for sticking with it and giving me your comment. It's truly appreciated.
It's a long one, I know. I'm guilty of that a lot! Thank you, Willow, for sticking with it and giving me your comment. It's truly appreciated.
30th Jan 2024 12:47pm
Truly a masterpiece writing here. Every stanza lived its own life. The entire piece holds one in captivation & is its own amazing reward!
31st Jan 2024 2:22am
I was thinking earlier, that this write is my "Bohemian Rhapsody". Not to say that it's at that level, but the way I broke it up and yet called it a singular thing. Much like our thoughts sometimes, all at once and trying to get them all settled somehow.
Thank you very much, Confluence. It's good to know that the effort paid off.
Thank you very much, Confluence. It's good to know that the effort paid off.
31st Jan 2024 1:45am
That's an awesome read, Styxian. Lovers are such and being in love another. What a talented write. I wish I can write like that.
31st Jan 2024 2:28am
Hey Grace. Write like YOU, because you write just fine.
The biggest lesson I learned about writing is to be a good reader. In a way, reading and writing stay together. Honestly, my better writes come from when I read, and get inspired by, things that I've read. I have the ideas and themes, and motivation. But reading sets the mood to write. Yeah? It's like keeping the motion of writing going.
Thank you for dropping in. And you keep writing your way. It's awesome.
The biggest lesson I learned about writing is to be a good reader. In a way, reading and writing stay together. Honestly, my better writes come from when I read, and get inspired by, things that I've read. I have the ideas and themes, and motivation. But reading sets the mood to write. Yeah? It's like keeping the motion of writing going.
Thank you for dropping in. And you keep writing your way. It's awesome.
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- Edited 31st Jan 2024 11:07am
31st Jan 2024 11:06am
What I found so intriguing here is there seems to be two distinct lifelines moving parallel… the real world, and the dream world. This seems to happen more succinctly when distance is involved. That beautiful description of the selfish metal bird really cemented that distance, and the melancholy it left behind is thick. I had to stop and take a breath.
I love the format of this. It reads like a letter and a memoir all at the same time, and even I know that’s not often done well.
Magnificent work.
I love the format of this. It reads like a letter and a memoir all at the same time, and even I know that’s not often done well.
Magnificent work.
1st Feb 2024 2:49am
I like your descriptive comment. I have no idea what "style" I write in. I just write. Lol. When someone describes it back to me a bit, I see it clearer actually. Cool.
And yeah, when it got to the flying away part, the melancholy definitely set in. Writing is an excellent therapist, though. I just look forward to the next time!
Thank you Goya, for the on point comment.
And yeah, when it got to the flying away part, the melancholy definitely set in. Writing is an excellent therapist, though. I just look forward to the next time!
Thank you Goya, for the on point comment.
1st Feb 2024 2:15am
This write is so beautiful baby. How you keep them coming one after another is so inspiring.
Writing like this can't be taught cause it's so authentically blending with your mind and how it works. You really
are inside all of these lines.
Each stanza - each specially chosen word - crafted in your signature style.
You flow in this baby. Your really do and it's an amazing experience to read.
I'm so very proud of you and your work:)
Writing like this can't be taught cause it's so authentically blending with your mind and how it works. You really
are inside all of these lines.
Each stanza - each specially chosen word - crafted in your signature style.
You flow in this baby. Your really do and it's an amazing experience to read.
I'm so very proud of you and your work:)
1st Feb 2024 2:55am
Sometimes it all just falls into place, baby. I packed a lot into one write, I know.
( I'm glad that you weren't looking for a quiet guy. Lol.)
Many of my recent writes have been along this theme, and very similar. But, I'm kinda staying on these thoughts, ya know?!
You make good inspiration, young lady. You make it easy for me.
Thank you, my love.
( I'm glad that you weren't looking for a quiet guy. Lol.)
Many of my recent writes have been along this theme, and very similar. But, I'm kinda staying on these thoughts, ya know?!
You make good inspiration, young lady. You make it easy for me.
Thank you, my love.
1st Feb 2024 3:00am
Ha!! you quiet - not even if you tried.
Even when you're quiet - you're eyes are talking baby.
In a good way!!
I think I'm addicted to calling you baby!!
I'm going back to buddy or pal. Yeah? LOL
Even when you're quiet - you're eyes are talking baby.
In a good way!!
I think I'm addicted to calling you baby!!
I'm going back to buddy or pal. Yeah? LOL
1st Feb 2024 3:05am
Whatever you call me is fine, as long as you call me.
Punk!
(I know you call me that to fire me up, so we'll wrestle!)
Punk!
(I know you call me that to fire me up, so we'll wrestle!)
3rd Feb 2024 5:09am
Dear S,
Phenomenal write. Not that I can think of one however, this has all the elements of an epic mythological story of two humans whose love has exploded and they are now a god and goddess. Quite magical. I enjoyed the undercurrent of joy in this piece. A pleasure and treasure to read. H🌷
Phenomenal write. Not that I can think of one however, this has all the elements of an epic mythological story of two humans whose love has exploded and they are now a god and goddess. Quite magical. I enjoyed the undercurrent of joy in this piece. A pleasure and treasure to read. H🌷
4th Feb 2024 1:43pm
Hello H. How's you?
This is an expansive write. That is politely saying it's "a lot". Lol.
I had no idea how it would go, or anything. It just falls out of my head usually. Maybe it's that way with most of us? It's a feeling, really. Like a blank film is running on the reel, so I grab a marker real quick and add some words and color to it.
That's how I write; it isn't just a blank screen on my tablet. It's a reel. I fill in the movie. Words are movement. Yeah?
It's good to see you drop in here. I value your validation yaknow.
Thank you for that .
This is an expansive write. That is politely saying it's "a lot". Lol.
I had no idea how it would go, or anything. It just falls out of my head usually. Maybe it's that way with most of us? It's a feeling, really. Like a blank film is running on the reel, so I grab a marker real quick and add some words and color to it.
That's how I write; it isn't just a blank screen on my tablet. It's a reel. I fill in the movie. Words are movement. Yeah?
It's good to see you drop in here. I value your validation yaknow.
Thank you for that .
24th Feb 2024 3:29pm
25th Feb 2024 9:24pm
Hey you!
I know it's lengthy (as my usual are!), so if it can hold someone's attention and they can feel rewarded for it, then it's a success to me. So thank you for letting me know.
I do try hard to post worthy stuff.
I know it's lengthy (as my usual are!), so if it can hold someone's attention and they can feel rewarded for it, then it's a success to me. So thank you for letting me know.
I do try hard to post worthy stuff.
