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He Loves Me
his hugs were real, his arms trembled
as he scooped me into an embrace
I was in a world of wonder
where dreams come alive in multicolour
struck by a lightning surprise
I believe he was sincere
my heart skipped a beat
a symphony of emotions suffused my heart
thunderstruck but flabbergasted
for youth is faded petals turned to potpourri
the vigour of yesteryears mere sepia
memories flicked through in waking dreams
I missed you
I think I'm in love with you
thunderstruck
with unbelief.
as he scooped me into an embrace
I was in a world of wonder
where dreams come alive in multicolour
struck by a lightning surprise
I believe he was sincere
my heart skipped a beat
a symphony of emotions suffused my heart
thunderstruck but flabbergasted
for youth is faded petals turned to potpourri
the vigour of yesteryears mere sepia
memories flicked through in waking dreams
I missed you
I think I'm in love with you
thunderstruck
with unbelief.
Published 24th Jan 2024
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Inspired by a competition.
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25th Jan 2024 00:07am
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25th Jan 2024 2:29am
He said it, not I. That's why it's in italics. It's okay though, it's fiction. Thanks for dropping by Billy. How have you been?
25th Jan 2024 2:40am
Ok, that sounds very encouraging. Oh, I'm absolutely fantastic thanks, especially when lovely poets like yourself are concerned about my welfare. It makes me feel important, so thank you, even though I know you weren't sayin' it to make me feel so. 😉
25th Jan 2024 3:21am
Of course I meant it. About how you are doing. It's nice to know fellow DUP a little bit more than surface level, where we speak poetry.
26th Jan 2024 3:28pm
This makes us think of doing she love me she loves me not with dandelion pappi. Really tight and descriptive with it Lady, not to long and not to short with just the right amount.
26th Jan 2024 9:23pm
Hi there...thank you so much for dropping by and reading me. Very kind of you to comment. Thank you 😊
30th Jan 2024 8:30pm
30th Jan 2024 9:05pm
30th Jan 2024 9:09pm
my pleasure Grace.
I read as I write
syllable by syllable
and find your writes
have great balance.
No easy task in our
frantic world.
I read as I write
syllable by syllable
and find your writes
have great balance.
No easy task in our
frantic world.
30th Jan 2024 9:22pm
Thank you ..🌹It's alright Rew, don't think of writing as a task but a joy, to be able to convey your thoughts in poetry. We are special people 😊you are. Not everyone can write like you can.
11th Feb 2024 10:10pm
"a symphony of emotions suffused my heart"
Wonderful poetic rendering especially with lines like this.
Awesome work.
Wonderful poetic rendering especially with lines like this.
Awesome work.
12th Feb 2024 1:14am
