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Psychoactive (11 Practice Bars/Stanzas)
Psychoactive iso-axis.
Spiral madness, eyeballs trancing.
Spinal spastic, cyclone stature.
Cycled backspins, tightrope waxing.
Mind blown passions, frightful lapsing.
Might flow active dice roll rapping.
Primal addict, twice-fold savage.
Smite those asking, "Why so whack, kid?"
Micro fraction, rivals ration.
Eiffel status, idol mapping.
Hiero hacks can idle gassing.
Spiteful slacking, dyno tracking.
Typo tantrums bind all bandwidth.
Stifled chances, titles stagnant.
Tribal lands have trifled trapping.
Trial grasping, final fashion.
Michael, dragon, my own fathom.
Triumph past this bioplastic.
Bible cherished, Zion's marriage.
Bridal Sabbath, rightful gladness.
Christ owns planet, price holds answers.
Vital vastness, vials vanish.
Spiral madness, eyeballs trancing.
Spinal spastic, cyclone stature.
Cycled backspins, tightrope waxing.
Mind blown passions, frightful lapsing.
Might flow active dice roll rapping.
Primal addict, twice-fold savage.
Smite those asking, "Why so whack, kid?"
Micro fraction, rivals ration.
Eiffel status, idol mapping.
Hiero hacks can idle gassing.
Spiteful slacking, dyno tracking.
Typo tantrums bind all bandwidth.
Stifled chances, titles stagnant.
Tribal lands have trifled trapping.
Trial grasping, final fashion.
Michael, dragon, my own fathom.
Triumph past this bioplastic.
Bible cherished, Zion's marriage.
Bridal Sabbath, rightful gladness.
Christ owns planet, price holds answers.
Vital vastness, vials vanish.
Published 19th Jan 2024
| Edited 26th Feb 2024
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Just a little practice lyricism or writing exercise.
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This piece had many great phrases I liked.
Mind blown passions, I love that.
I think you did a great job.
I relate right away with the title, I don't know if that's necessarily a good thing, lol
Sorry for being so lackluster, lol
It's been a grueling day.
Mind blown passions, I love that.
I think you did a great job.
I relate right away with the title, I don't know if that's necessarily a good thing, lol
Sorry for being so lackluster, lol
It's been a grueling day.
20th Jan 2024 1:42am
No, you're fine. Thanks for checking it out. Glad you enjoyed it.
Yeah, with what I said in the critique of your Black Lace Moon, I didn't mean it was evil or anything. Just that it seemed to have dark elements in the way it was communicated, is all. I guess I get kind of sensitive when it comes to things using erotic or intimate language, because I have kind of a personal privacy in my life that I don't particularly share in with others on social media. By that, I mean I don't kiss and tell, and I'm old fashioned, when it comes to romance. It seems as though we live in a day and age where such is the meaning of life to many - to bolster some kind of image that's supposedly "love" in some kind of fashion that's supposed to appeal to others. To me, that is a generational curse being passed on. Anyway, I'm not trying to judge you, just some of my own conviction, so that you understand where I'm coming from,
I love exploring many styles, even sometimes dark. There really is a lot out there, in reference to things of the mind being inspired to write. I guess I should be more responsible, if I'm going to explore a sort of hip hop or rap influence, heh. I don't necessarily agree with violence, and some of the subject matter in this, but it's just a word exercise.
Thanks for stopping by, and hope to hear from you soon, as well as share in writing and critiquing!
Yeah, with what I said in the critique of your Black Lace Moon, I didn't mean it was evil or anything. Just that it seemed to have dark elements in the way it was communicated, is all. I guess I get kind of sensitive when it comes to things using erotic or intimate language, because I have kind of a personal privacy in my life that I don't particularly share in with others on social media. By that, I mean I don't kiss and tell, and I'm old fashioned, when it comes to romance. It seems as though we live in a day and age where such is the meaning of life to many - to bolster some kind of image that's supposedly "love" in some kind of fashion that's supposed to appeal to others. To me, that is a generational curse being passed on. Anyway, I'm not trying to judge you, just some of my own conviction, so that you understand where I'm coming from,
I love exploring many styles, even sometimes dark. There really is a lot out there, in reference to things of the mind being inspired to write. I guess I should be more responsible, if I'm going to explore a sort of hip hop or rap influence, heh. I don't necessarily agree with violence, and some of the subject matter in this, but it's just a word exercise.
Thanks for stopping by, and hope to hear from you soon, as well as share in writing and critiquing!
20th Jan 2024 10:12am
Hi just so you know I loved your critique of my post. I have total respect for you wanting your private life private & I actually think it's very cool you are old fashioned with romance.
I do feel that style you used could be used as rap, I don't know I can picture it to music, lol
I always have respect for other people's individuality or I try very hard to. Have a marvelous weekend!
I do feel that style you used could be used as rap, I don't know I can picture it to music, lol
I always have respect for other people's individuality or I try very hard to. Have a marvelous weekend!
20th Jan 2024 10:34pm
This would sort of be like Indy hip hop or basically nerd hip hop, heavily laden with multiple syllable rhyming and the rhyme scheme carried throughout the body. It definitely has the "technicality" of hip hop, just not the most popularized style(s), which a lot of people are used to hearing.
