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Plot twist
Reaching for a hand
bumped a trigger instead
Watching the projectile enter between ribs
Standing frozen
in that familiar helpless distortion
Reality melting as ears buzz
with the roar of silent confusion
Feeling the slow explosion inside
fragments flying off in all directions
lodging in heart, brain, throat
Smearing memories, slicing futures
This was an unforeseen plot twist
But look!
That growing red stain is so pretty
I guess this is how the end begins
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Re. Plot twist
31st Dec 2023 2:28am
PTSD is a bitch.
Being caught off guard like that is more than unnerving. I like how you turned it around at the end.
I’ve had Chronic PTSD for more years than I’ve been alive (I actually think that’s true, lol).
The title works perfectly for this.
Being caught off guard like that is more than unnerving. I like how you turned it around at the end.
I’ve had Chronic PTSD for more years than I’ve been alive (I actually think that’s true, lol).
The title works perfectly for this.
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Re: Re. Plot twist
31st Dec 2023 5:38pm
I don't have that diagnosis, but I'm familiar with a trauma response. Glad to know this wasn't too off-base for the tag.
I'm not sure if I turned it around at the end or just dissociated... ah, whatever! Thanks for visiting me. 😊
❤️k
I'm not sure if I turned it around at the end or just dissociated... ah, whatever! Thanks for visiting me. 😊
❤️k
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31st Dec 2023 5:10am
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Re: Re. Plot twist
31st Dec 2023 5:39pm
Thanks so much for stopping by to read and comment! Wishing you all the best.
😎k
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31st Dec 2023 6:22pm
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Re. Plot twist
31st Dec 2023 6:25am
I kinda wanted to write something along the lines of this but samurai swords. You've put eloquent and beautiful words together to describe something so difficult and traumatic.
Great work.
Great work.
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31st Dec 2023 5:40pm
Re. Plot twist
31st Dec 2023 6:38am
Dear K,
This write brilliantly defines as news. When the camera zooms in and everything else becomes distorted as though you’re under water. May 2024 be a brighter year. Your voice shines and outshines. H🌷
This write brilliantly defines as news. When the camera zooms in and everything else becomes distorted as though you’re under water. May 2024 be a brighter year. Your voice shines and outshines. H🌷
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Re: Re. Plot twist
31st Dec 2023 5:41pm
Dear H,
You always have such encouraging comments! I'm grateful for your presence. Wishing you grace & peace in 2024.
❤️k
You always have such encouraging comments! I'm grateful for your presence. Wishing you grace & peace in 2024.
❤️k
Re. Plot twist
31st Dec 2023 10:59am
Society has turned very toxic - and living well in such an atmosphere is an ever-increasing challenge. I agree with Honoria 'May 2024 be a brighter year'.
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Re: Re. Plot twist
31st Dec 2023 5:43pm
Thank you, Josh. Yes, the world keeps us on edge, and it's hard to avoid bumping into each other's sensitivities. Happy new year to you and yours!
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Re. Plot twist
2nd Jan 2024 10:57pm
This is so different from your usual way of speaking. I like how this developed.
Darkness permeates everything and everyone. This is a:
BIG LIKE
Darkness permeates everything and everyone. This is a:
BIG LIKE
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Thank you! Is it different? Huh. It's just... what was going on inside me at the time, I guess. I appreciate the big like, and the reading list!
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Re. Plot twist
4th Jan 2024 2:33am
What!
I actually love the ending, btw. The whole thing had me edgy, wondering what was next. And yeah, it has a dark tone a bit. Yet, it also has a curious spellbound quality to it as well.
Cool !! What a cool write!
I actually love the ending, btw. The whole thing had me edgy, wondering what was next. And yeah, it has a dark tone a bit. Yet, it also has a curious spellbound quality to it as well.
Cool !! What a cool write!
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Re: Re. Plot twist
4th Jan 2024 4:56pm
Hey, thanks! I'm glad you like it. I'm still wondering what comes next too...
❤k
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