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SOUTHERN PRIMITIVE
alexander,
that boy,
he's talented
in ways
i can't even
comprehend --
builds a thing
to perfection,
each piece
cut precisely
and snugged against
the other
to make
a harmonious
polished
perfect
whole
and, i swear,
sometimes
i just wish,
but deep down
i love what's mine,
all the freewheelin'
make shift
hodgepodge
crazy
junked up
recycled
upcycled
brainstormed
make do
half assed
full fledged
bullshit i make
because,
it's just me...
it's my
goddamn art
that boy,
he's talented
in ways
i can't even
comprehend --
builds a thing
to perfection,
each piece
cut precisely
and snugged against
the other
to make
a harmonious
polished
perfect
whole
and, i swear,
sometimes
i just wish,
but deep down
i love what's mine,
all the freewheelin'
make shift
hodgepodge
crazy
junked up
recycled
upcycled
brainstormed
make do
half assed
full fledged
bullshit i make
because,
it's just me...
it's my
goddamn art
Published 18th Dec 2023
Author's Note
My young friend is a genius -- an amazing craftsman. I am always in awe and truly inspired, though i know my talents lay elsewhere.
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18th Dec 2023 2:14pm
they are craftsmen, we are wordsmiths, they forge from raw; we forge from nothing,
we create , they manipulate....their objects will fade by time.as they prisonners of space;
our words will last after we die..........
we create , they manipulate....their objects will fade by time.as they prisonners of space;
our words will last after we die..........
18th Dec 2023 8:09pm
Thanks so much for reading and commenting, my friend.
I really like that, though personally I've written and had published a number of rather obscure short stories.
There are some, though, whose words indeed outlive them.
Thank you again.
J.
I really like that, though personally I've written and had published a number of rather obscure short stories.
There are some, though, whose words indeed outlive them.
Thank you again.
J.
18th Dec 2023 2:54pm
Nicely done... the title of this is also the title of Mary Oliver's Pulitzer Prize winning collection of poetry...
18th Dec 2023 7:51pm
Thanks, L., for reading and commenting. I didn't know about Mary Oliver. I knew of "american primitive" as John Fahey's style of guitar picking. I'll change it.
20th Dec 2023 6:52am
Dear J,
Fantastic piece. Is it not human nature to compare ourselves when we see something admirable? What I love is the commitment by the end to appreciate the talents given to us and highlighting those as we learn and grow. Fabulous piece. H🌷
Fantastic piece. Is it not human nature to compare ourselves when we see something admirable? What I love is the commitment by the end to appreciate the talents given to us and highlighting those as we learn and grow. Fabulous piece. H🌷
20th Dec 2023 12:47pm
I am awed by the talent around me. And here as well.
Thanks so much, Honoria, for reading and commenting.
As always, very much appreciated.
Thanks so much, Honoria, for reading and commenting.
As always, very much appreciated.
