Choctaw Cherokee

I hope to engorge some of that old Blue Ridge night magic myself when Winter comes, and for lots & lots of snow! Speaking of which, I probably need some new moccasins.

Absolutely love the simplicity in this.

Thanks! The Farmer's Almanac is calling for a very cold ( and snowy ) El Nino winter this year, so I am sure you will be engorging in plenty of night magic and snow!

A pleasantly easy read, harkening to a less cluttered way of life, simple, but not shallow.  
 
In the lines  
   beating history's  
   drum of time  
 
It might be how I am reading it, but ‘history’s’ has an awkward rhythm.  Perhaps  
   beat our story’s  
   drum of time.  
 
to give a nice rhythmic beat to those two lines, and with the idea that ‘story’ seems more fitting to Cherokee than ‘history’.  
 
 

The second stanza is evocative, and this third stanza is totally splendid:  
   Winter's stillness  
   under a Moon so engorged  
   children believed  
   it was pregnant with snow  
 
 
Perhaps trim the closing line to:  
   will we find our way again.  
 
Because this embodies both return and rediscovery.

Well, that was helpful. Although it was intended to be a very simple read to reflect a history preceding colonization, it could certainly use some tidying up! Thanks so much for your suggestions. I will most likely incorporate them.

Dear A,

This jumps from the page to create such a vivid picture of lives well ordered and purposeful. I really enjoyed the purity and the history in this piece. H🌷

Thank you, Honoria. I read once that where there is "white man" there can rarely be peace. I do believe that's true.

This is my favourite of yours in a while. It reminds me of the last shot in Killers of the Flower Moon, of a Native drum circle.

Thank you, Mr. Karswell. If I remember correctly, you always preferred the simple and direct over overt imagery, bells, and whistles. xo

Hmm, felt this. Visually and emotionally stunning.

Thank you, Wally, and for the RL honor.

This touches on all of the senses so clearly and beautifully, touches the very heart and soul of the reader :) I literally felt like I was there in this scene you show us :) I myself am 1/4 Lakota and very proud to be too. I agree, can we ever get back to a peaceful way of life with nature and universe. I hope so. Lovely writing as always, enjoyed :)

Thank you, Michael! I had no idea you were 1/4 Lakota! I appreciate your comments.