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Sensitivity Without
As your beauty commands my attention I ponder my place in the grand scheme of things.
Were it not for my weakness she might lose her vanity which masks itself in a lovers promise of tomorrow.
As she walks by she uses her hypnotic curves to set abound a course to which I must act in accordance with her will.
She turned him into a junkie overnight. Pheromones being his narcotic to which there are no 12 steps to healing.
Were it not for my weakness she might lose her vanity which masks itself in a lovers promise of tomorrow.
As she walks by she uses her hypnotic curves to set abound a course to which I must act in accordance with her will.
She turned him into a junkie overnight. Pheromones being his narcotic to which there are no 12 steps to healing.
Published 7th Oct 2023
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8th Oct 2023 10:38am
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13th Oct 2023 00:24am
This has a lot of potential, in showing the damage that such things can do to the mind and people. Good job in capturing a theme, and transitioning the emotions, sequence, and occurrence. "Were it not for my weakness she might lose her vanity which masks itself in a lovers promise of tomorrow" is quite a unique expression and from my perspective, a unique observation. I'd like to see more from you. Don't be reluctant to try different styles and formats. I think you have some talents. Respect, and take care.
