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Stiletto Meadow
At nine years old
The water ate my lungs
Turning me ice cold
In the year 1984
With my mother’s heels on
Playing dress up
And hop scotch
Across the pond
Where the scent of
My ghost lives on
Gliding with the swans
I’m dead and gone
Butterfly broken wings
Reflect beside my
Fossilized teeth
Playing hide and seek
Sunflowers larger
Than the vintage sun
Gave rays of shade
To my antique bones
It’s now 2084
I’m dead and gone
But the scent of my
Ghost lives on
At Stiletto Meadow
Inside flowers that bloom
In butterfly cocoons
In shadows of the past
Alive in the grass
A hundred years have passed
Trying to reach you
From the other side
I see you watching casually
From across the way
I play hop scotch on lily pads
Darting across the pond
Wearing nothing but six inch heels
Made from red clover
Your stoic face lies
There are crinkled smiles
On the corner of your eyes
Cause you love me so
Sunflowers bloom larger
Than the florescence sun
Providing us shade
Where love’s not afraid
No rules to follow
You and I alone
Immortal
At Stiletto Meadow
The water ate my lungs
Turning me ice cold
In the year 1984
With my mother’s heels on
Playing dress up
And hop scotch
Across the pond
Where the scent of
My ghost lives on
Gliding with the swans
I’m dead and gone
Butterfly broken wings
Reflect beside my
Fossilized teeth
Playing hide and seek
Sunflowers larger
Than the vintage sun
Gave rays of shade
To my antique bones
It’s now 2084
I’m dead and gone
But the scent of my
Ghost lives on
At Stiletto Meadow
Inside flowers that bloom
In butterfly cocoons
In shadows of the past
Alive in the grass
A hundred years have passed
Trying to reach you
From the other side
I see you watching casually
From across the way
I play hop scotch on lily pads
Darting across the pond
Wearing nothing but six inch heels
Made from red clover
Your stoic face lies
There are crinkled smiles
On the corner of your eyes
Cause you love me so
Sunflowers bloom larger
Than the florescence sun
Providing us shade
Where love’s not afraid
No rules to follow
You and I alone
Immortal
At Stiletto Meadow
Written by
Adelphina
Published 22nd Sep 2023
Author's Note
I originally wrote this as a love poem. Then I realized Halloween was around the corner so I wanted to make it darker. So I wrote another one in a darker tone. After some deliberation I decided to blend them together. I think it worked. LOL
Hope you enjoy:)
Hope you enjoy:)
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Re: Re. Stiletto Meadow
23rd Sep 2023 2:08am
Well howdy Tim!
Thank you so much. I love mixing it up when it comes to the darker side of things. I'm a happy peppy person so with this tone of writing I try to leave a lasting image. I'm so happy you gave me a "excellent work" comment!! Means the world amigo:)
Also enjoyed the fact you heard a melody in this.
I can't help it!! I love to write like music is playing in the background.
It's a habit that I've learned to embrace:)
Thank you so much. I love mixing it up when it comes to the darker side of things. I'm a happy peppy person so with this tone of writing I try to leave a lasting image. I'm so happy you gave me a "excellent work" comment!! Means the world amigo:)
Also enjoyed the fact you heard a melody in this.
I can't help it!! I love to write like music is playing in the background.
It's a habit that I've learned to embrace:)
Re. Stiletto Meadow
22nd Sep 2023 4:26am
hello beautiful Adelphina this really, really great I love it...p.s. I often stitch poems together I call them Frankenstein's lol 💕
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Re: Re. Stiletto Meadow
23rd Sep 2023 2:13am
Hi Crimsin:)
First off - I want to say thank you for the nomination. Means the world coming from ya chica. I admire all of your work so it is heartfelt that you enjoyed it enough to nominate.
I love that you call them Frankensteins!! That's brilliant and so true. They so are. haha
Thanks for the RL too!
First off - I want to say thank you for the nomination. Means the world coming from ya chica. I admire all of your work so it is heartfelt that you enjoyed it enough to nominate.
I love that you call them Frankensteins!! That's brilliant and so true. They so are. haha
Thanks for the RL too!
Re: Re. Stiletto Meadow
23rd Sep 2023 2:15am
Hey PS!
Thanks for the dark indeed comment. Wasn't too sure about the length but I said fuck it and posted it anyway. hahaha
Thanks amigo for stopping by!
Thanks for the dark indeed comment. Wasn't too sure about the length but I said fuck it and posted it anyway. hahaha
Thanks amigo for stopping by!
Re. Stiletto Meadow
22nd Sep 2023 7:14pm
Re: Re. Stiletto Meadow
23rd Sep 2023 2:17am
Someone's keeping an eye on all of us!
As for me It must be my abuella who I'm named after:)
As for me It must be my abuella who I'm named after:)
Re. Stiletto Meadow
23rd Sep 2023 00:39am
I love the twist of love & Halloween & the way you played with the imagery. Well done! 🎃😊
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Re: Re. Stiletto Meadow
23rd Sep 2023 2:20am
Hi Willow:)
I love Halloween. LOL
It lets me use my imagination in a different sense. It doesn't have to always be 100 percent pretty but it's always gotta have style:) Whatever tone you use. When it comes to darker toned pieces I love to add some element of beauty to it. Thanks for checking this out!
I love Halloween. LOL
It lets me use my imagination in a different sense. It doesn't have to always be 100 percent pretty but it's always gotta have style:) Whatever tone you use. When it comes to darker toned pieces I love to add some element of beauty to it. Thanks for checking this out!
Re. Stiletto Meadow
24th Sep 2023 1:37am
I love how your mind contains so much "story", as you take breaks from getting that book done! Your wheels are always turning and I admire how much detail you retain of things yet to be written down. This write is an example of that. Two distinct ideas melded into one.
You have such an awesome brain under that beautiful hair!
Obviously our brains hooked up before we ever did. Lol. Your way of details aren't something seen elsewhere. Unique. There's something solid and definite in the way you write.
Your details are so strong.
And no, this is not a biased comment! I'm still your literary pal, aside from the whole lovers/BF-GF stuff!
I'm just glad that you still have the desire to write poetry in here, knowing that your book needs your majority of time.
Hey, you're incredible you know. Just a reminder!
You have such an awesome brain under that beautiful hair!
Obviously our brains hooked up before we ever did. Lol. Your way of details aren't something seen elsewhere. Unique. There's something solid and definite in the way you write.
Your details are so strong.
And no, this is not a biased comment! I'm still your literary pal, aside from the whole lovers/BF-GF stuff!
I'm just glad that you still have the desire to write poetry in here, knowing that your book needs your majority of time.
Hey, you're incredible you know. Just a reminder!
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Re: Re. Stiletto Meadow
24th Sep 2023 10:34pm
Hey cutie pie:)
Thank you. Wasn't sure about the length but I'm glad it went with it anyway:) I've been in a lot of places in my head. hahaha
As you know.
Look at you throwing my book out there. It's got a long way to go but It's going to be epic!!! Thanks baby for all of your encouragement. I'm going to need it but the more I see my name on the header of each page along with the title - Yikes -it's getting real.
thanks for the RL and loving me!!
Dallas has their hands full tonight!!!
Ughhh WTF!!
Thank you. Wasn't sure about the length but I'm glad it went with it anyway:) I've been in a lot of places in my head. hahaha
As you know.
Look at you throwing my book out there. It's got a long way to go but It's going to be epic!!! Thanks baby for all of your encouragement. I'm going to need it but the more I see my name on the header of each page along with the title - Yikes -it's getting real.
thanks for the RL and loving me!!
Dallas has their hands full tonight!!!
Ughhh WTF!!
Re: Re. Stiletto Meadow
24th Sep 2023 11:24pm
Dallas is still in the game. (It's a good day to be a Dolphins fan!)
And of course I'm going to encourage you! We a team! Your joy is my joy too. Although our stresses over writing are a bit more personal. I'm there for ya baby, especially on breaks!
And of course I'm going to encourage you! We a team! Your joy is my joy too. Although our stresses over writing are a bit more personal. I'm there for ya baby, especially on breaks!
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Re. Stiletto Meadow
24th Sep 2023 10:27pm
What are we but an arc within the circle of things, life, existence, being. Today we live off of that which has been fertilized only to become fertilizer ourselves. Totally loved some of the imagery within the piece, tight work Lady
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Re: Re. Stiletto Meadow
24th Sep 2023 10:39pm
Hey Meme!
I felt like going somewhere a little dark and I wanted to date it.
As in giving it a time stamp. I was a kid in the eighties so I went with 1984.
And It grew from there. Always trying to expand my mind in writing into areas that might be uncomfortable.
thanks for taking a look at this. Glad you enjoyed!!
I felt like going somewhere a little dark and I wanted to date it.
As in giving it a time stamp. I was a kid in the eighties so I went with 1984.
And It grew from there. Always trying to expand my mind in writing into areas that might be uncomfortable.
thanks for taking a look at this. Glad you enjoyed!!
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1st Oct 2023 9:40pm
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1st Oct 2023 10:09pm
Thanks so much.
I wrote and didn't want it to come across choppy.
Glad it flowed so well:)
I wrote and didn't want it to come across choppy.
Glad it flowed so well:)
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Re. Stiletto Meadow
7th Jan 2024 1:58am
Read this again today.
"Your stoic face lies
There are crinkled smiles
On the corner of your eyes"
This gets me every time.
"Your stoic face lies
There are crinkled smiles
On the corner of your eyes"
This gets me every time.
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Re: Re. Stiletto Meadow
8th Jan 2024 1:13am
I love men with crinkles at the
corner of their eyes. Older and distinguished.
I find it attractive. There is life in those crinkles:)
thanks for reading again.
It makes me happy that you came back for another read:)
Thank you for that!
corner of their eyes. Older and distinguished.
I find it attractive. There is life in those crinkles:)
thanks for reading again.
It makes me happy that you came back for another read:)
Thank you for that!
Re. Stiletto Meadow
1st Feb 2024 11:12am
Lots of emotion coming through on this piece. Well executed. Nice flow.
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Re: Re. Stiletto Meadow
18th Feb 2024 1:44am
Hey K.O.
I wrote two then decided to blend them together. I enjoy writing pieces that take me places - I'm just the medium.
This was one of those writes.
Thanks for stopping by:)
I wrote two then decided to blend them together. I enjoy writing pieces that take me places - I'm just the medium.
This was one of those writes.
Thanks for stopping by:)
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24th Feb 2024 00:19am
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