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Lust
Hotel room door
Awkward impediment
Tap a card
Access granted
Tumbling through the door
Frantic kissing
Hands grasping
Breasts
Ass
Crotch
Dick
Clit
Giving and receiving pleasure
Needing
Wanting
Unstoppable
Driving both our needs
Pants dropped
Skirt pushed up
Panties ripped
Bent over
Penetrated
Raw need
Orgasm
Tender kisses on the back of your neck
Embracing you fully
Now
Tomorrow
Forever
Awkward impediment
Tap a card
Access granted
Tumbling through the door
Frantic kissing
Hands grasping
Breasts
Ass
Crotch
Dick
Clit
Giving and receiving pleasure
Needing
Wanting
Unstoppable
Driving both our needs
Pants dropped
Skirt pushed up
Panties ripped
Bent over
Penetrated
Raw need
Orgasm
Tender kisses on the back of your neck
Embracing you fully
Now
Tomorrow
Forever
Published 21st Jul 2023
Author's Note
I was trying for a cadence here that pairs with the narrative and helps convey the emotion and energy of the scene. Was that successful? Would you suggest any changes to further add to the energy of the poem? Thank you.
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21st Jul 2023 3:36pm
21st Jul 2023 9:35pm
21st Jul 2023 3:54pm
I agree with Robert.
You know me, I can be direct. I like how you just spill it.
Great job.
You know me, I can be direct. I like how you just spill it.
Great job.
21st Jul 2023 9:34pm
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21st Jul 2023 8:46pm
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24th Jul 2023 00:29am
I enjoyed watching the erotic "movie" (movement of words). Hugs and peace, ORAL
26th Jul 2023 5:34pm
I think the short snappy phrases applied here add to the speed & energy of the piece. Works well. 😊👍
7th Aug 2023 11:20pm
Ah, this really took me back to 'the' hotel room. ;)
Access granted indeed...
This room so in need of being ramsacked.
Just like me.
Skirt pushed up, panties ripped, bent over...
Oh yeah! Now tomorrow forever.
So many hotels, so many possibilities.
Raw need and orgasm are always there.
I just hope they keep the black light away. lol
Emotion and energy you definitely conveyed.
I love to travel and I love to be traveled. ;p
Access granted indeed...
This room so in need of being ramsacked.
Just like me.
Skirt pushed up, panties ripped, bent over...
Oh yeah! Now tomorrow forever.
So many hotels, so many possibilities.
Raw need and orgasm are always there.
I just hope they keep the black light away. lol
Emotion and energy you definitely conveyed.
I love to travel and I love to be traveled. ;p
12th Sep 2023 5:46am
Dear KX,
Thank you for the compliments. It is great to hear that it evoked some pleasant memories. Passions remembered and yet to be experienced. I like how you play around with words “ramsacked”. I am assuming this was not a typo- for some reason “ramsacked” adds a bit of a twist that is really visceral.
Thank you for the compliments. It is great to hear that it evoked some pleasant memories. Passions remembered and yet to be experienced. I like how you play around with words “ramsacked”. I am assuming this was not a typo- for some reason “ramsacked” adds a bit of a twist that is really visceral.
