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Wishes and Stars
My thoughts glittered with a lust of wishes,
have been mingling with the night's dark
meadow blooming with stars.
With belief burning in my blood,
I pry open despairs bars.
My raw sparkling hope,
The universe will guard.
To intensely yearn to the midnight sky
Glisten the shards of dreams that refuse to die.
have been mingling with the night's dark
meadow blooming with stars.
With belief burning in my blood,
I pry open despairs bars.
My raw sparkling hope,
The universe will guard.
To intensely yearn to the midnight sky
Glisten the shards of dreams that refuse to die.
Published 16th Jul 2023
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16th Jul 2023 8:31pm
We most definitely should never let our hopes & dreams die. It's what keeps us going, after all! Your poem expressed this very well, Debbie. 😊
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16th Jul 2023 9:19pm
The use of your language here is quality. It's like looking into outer space, only with longing to belong. Your expressions blend morality and metaphor with emotional aesthetics that create a unique and relatable environment. Convictions of your endurance come to life in the direction of your transition. The struggle of conquering and overcoming negative reinforcement, or whatever factors weigh on you, seems to bring your resolve to life. An embrace of nature and the universe, and the great beyond. The beauty therein, seeking to belong. Anyway, thanks for sharing. That's just my little interpretation, heh.
16th Jul 2023 9:58pm
I so appreciate your comments, it's like I get an outside look at the poem.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read.
Anonymous
27th Jul 2023 4:50am
Ooh, this is really pretty. That closing couplet has a classic poetry feel Beautiful imagery, and memorable concept. Awesome work
27th Jul 2023 10:52am
