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could not
inhale
exhale
mocking time
smelling flowers
that I despise
I watch the clock
and count the sighs
ignoring air
I could not die
the sun is cold
and dreams unkind
bring signs and dread
I can't deny
I squint to see
still lamp black blind
ignoring light
I could not die
I eat fresh graves
to sympathize
and choke on words
without goodbye
spit out the tears
they leave behind
ignoring warm
I could not die
I sleep blank sleep
to tranquilize
pound my fists
and try to cry
the knuckles bleed
I don't know why
when I walk dead
and cannot die
H
exhale
mocking time
smelling flowers
that I despise
I watch the clock
and count the sighs
ignoring air
I could not die
the sun is cold
and dreams unkind
bring signs and dread
I can't deny
I squint to see
still lamp black blind
ignoring light
I could not die
I eat fresh graves
to sympathize
and choke on words
without goodbye
spit out the tears
they leave behind
ignoring warm
I could not die
I sleep blank sleep
to tranquilize
pound my fists
and try to cry
the knuckles bleed
I don't know why
when I walk dead
and cannot die
H
Published 11th Feb 2010
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Anonymous
11th Feb 2010 6:05pm
really love this part
'I eat fresh graves
to sympathize
and choke on words
without goodbye
spit out the tears
they leave behind'.brilliant heartmelting piece !
'I eat fresh graves
to sympathize
and choke on words
without goodbye
spit out the tears
they leave behind'.brilliant heartmelting piece !
11th Feb 2010 6:28pm
You are spoiling me, dear poetess. Now I will never feel complete with a word from you *winks*
Many thanks for your glances.
H
Many thanks for your glances.
H
11th Feb 2010 6:57pm
I eat fresh graves
to sympathize
and choke on words
without goodbye
spit out the tears
they leave behind
ignoring warm
I could not die
I sleep blank sleep
to tranquilize
pound my fists
and try to cry
the knuckles bleed
I don't know why
when I walk dead
and cannot die
those lines were especially powerful to me.. what made you think of me and post this?
to sympathize
and choke on words
without goodbye
spit out the tears
they leave behind
ignoring warm
I could not die
I sleep blank sleep
to tranquilize
pound my fists
and try to cry
the knuckles bleed
I don't know why
when I walk dead
and cannot die
those lines were especially powerful to me.. what made you think of me and post this?
13th Feb 2010 11:42pm
11th Feb 2010 9:55pm
i agree: last two stanzas are the most powerful ones in the whole poem.
i liked the repetition of line: "I could not die" you are exploring the limits of your own self, slowly deleting layers and masks just to find out that you "walk dead and cannot die"
i liked the repetition of line: "I could not die" you are exploring the limits of your own self, slowly deleting layers and masks just to find out that you "walk dead and cannot die"
13th Feb 2010 11:46pm
