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Blue
Your eyes were deep oceans.
Salted with pain.
Drained from our veins.
I have a fear of drowning in you.
Silent confessions were like opioids.
The feelings that consume my heart
are now bone deep.
My cells know.
Why my blood runs slow.
When you kiss my pale
pouty lips.
Further I slip into
the waves of you.
Salted with pain.
Drained from our veins.
I have a fear of drowning in you.
Silent confessions were like opioids.
The feelings that consume my heart
are now bone deep.
My cells know.
Why my blood runs slow.
When you kiss my pale
pouty lips.
Further I slip into
the waves of you.
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Re. Blue
15th May 2023 2:24am
Nice!
Very clever, using the "salted with pain" after the ocean line (Saltwater).
This is a great read, and I was hoping for more, because it kept me interested (easily).
Well done, Debbie.
Very clever, using the "salted with pain" after the ocean line (Saltwater).
This is a great read, and I was hoping for more, because it kept me interested (easily).
Well done, Debbie.
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Re: Re. Blue
15th May 2023 3:53am
Thank you so much. I would like to write some lengthier poems.
Thx for stopping bye, have a peaceful night 🌙
Thx for stopping bye, have a peaceful night 🌙
Re. Blue
15th May 2023 4:15am
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Re. Blue
15th May 2023 4:59pm
This is a cascading wonder that uses perfect brevity to instill this almost sinfully intimate and viscerally palpable sense of lustful obsession...
I very much enjoyed the minimalistic take, here. To me, it accentuates in such an apropos way.
Terrific work, dear Debbie!
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I very much enjoyed the minimalistic take, here. To me, it accentuates in such an apropos way.
Terrific work, dear Debbie!
-`ღ´-
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Re: Re. Blue
15th May 2023 7:02pm
Wow, thank you so much! I'll be smiling all day after your nice comments.
Obsession - one of my fav things to write about, lol. I have had a few grand ones.
Have an amazing day 💙
Obsession - one of my fav things to write about, lol. I have had a few grand ones.
Have an amazing day 💙
Re. Blue
Drowning in another's soul and awakening to love is a testament to poetic creation.
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15th May 2023 7:17pm
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Re: Re. Blue
16th May 2023 9:37am
I can get lost in blue eyes too, lol.
Thank you so much for your kind comments. 💜
Thank you so much for your kind comments. 💜
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Re. Blue
20th May 2023 4:10am
The Opioid metaphor really puts it into perspective. It's like you've entrusted your hope in a flame about to burn out, and leave you withered. Anyway, as always, you have good, creative language here. The concept and metaphors take a concise, compacted meaning of course in direction. You can certainly carry a theme unique to your own skillset. Anyway, I look forward to reading more of your work!
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