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2 Candy Bars and A Bag of Chips
He stole from her store at least once a week.
She figured he must be hungry.
She let him go time after time.
Didn't want to ruin his young life by calling
the cops. It was only candy.
Fast forward 15 years and 100 miles away
her son is car-jacked and killed.
She looked over her sons body and weept.
The police had the killer.
She was told his name. It felt familiar.
She went home and cried and then a flash of
light went through her mind and she saw that little
boys face and remembered his name.
She was filled with hate and rage.
Regret. Why did she keep letting him go?
If she had stopped him then, would her son
be alive today? Perhaps the cops could've,
would've scared him straight. She hated herself.
Sometimes our kindness comes back, just not
in the way we expect.
She figured he must be hungry.
She let him go time after time.
Didn't want to ruin his young life by calling
the cops. It was only candy.
Fast forward 15 years and 100 miles away
her son is car-jacked and killed.
She looked over her sons body and weept.
The police had the killer.
She was told his name. It felt familiar.
She went home and cried and then a flash of
light went through her mind and she saw that little
boys face and remembered his name.
She was filled with hate and rage.
Regret. Why did she keep letting him go?
If she had stopped him then, would her son
be alive today? Perhaps the cops could've,
would've scared him straight. She hated herself.
Sometimes our kindness comes back, just not
in the way we expect.
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Re. 2 Candy Bars and A Bag of Chips
1st May 2023 3:31pm
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1st May 2023 3:41pm
Re. 2 Candy Bars and A Bag of Chips
1st May 2023 9:51pm
But do the statistics validate the anecdote enough to consider as a factor in determining public policy?
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2nd May 2023 1:37am
Statistics can be manipulated to favor any side.
Every person has their own experience with
consequences..
Every person has their own experience with
consequences..
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2nd May 2023 1:43am
The proper skeptic mistrusts everything, but some statistics are better than none at all for the same reason that an educated guess is better than an uneducated one, consequences be damned.
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Re. 2 Candy Bars and A Bag of Chips
2nd May 2023 7:47am
A well presented anecdote on social dynamics ... your eye, both photographic and literary is, as always, unique and superb in capturing a scene, a moment, a cautionary tale ... though your subject matter is often dark, it is also loved ... Bless and love ...
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2nd May 2023 2:33pm
Re. 2 Candy Bars and A Bag of Chips
2nd May 2023 11:49am
Dear N,
This poem took my breath away. The irony of kindnesses can be a huge plot twist. This write has so many moral, social, spiritual levels and complexities. I can see this used as a discussion piece in a classroom setting. Outstanding! H🌷
This poem took my breath away. The irony of kindnesses can be a huge plot twist. This write has so many moral, social, spiritual levels and complexities. I can see this used as a discussion piece in a classroom setting. Outstanding! H🌷
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2nd May 2023 2:37pm
I got caught shoplifting as a child. I stole gum from Frank's Nursery. My mom saw me in the car with it in my hand and she marched me back in and made me tell the manager what I did and return the stolen gum. I felt so ashamed. If you keep letting someone go because you feel bad for them your teaching them nothing about actions and consequences.
Re. 2 Candy Bars and A Bag of Chips
7th May 2023 11:31pm
Great paradox of the choices we make and any number of consequences that follow.
Excellent.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
Excellent.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re. 2 Candy Bars and A Bag of Chips
24th Jun 2023 1:45am
Loved this, not for the tragedy but for how sometimes life may treat us even when we put positive vibes into the world. It's tough write but one that holds true for many out there who have put anything but kindness out into the world and got treated like crap.
Strong write.
Strong write.
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2 Candy Bars and A Bag of Chips
I don't even know you, but your writing couldn't help pulling me in. A few of your later pieces pulled me backward to this. You demonstrate that negligible habits, allowed to flourish, die hard and can kill viciously.
A sililar situation, of sorts: a lady I know ran a music mart. She hired a man as a delivery driver, gave him meals and room, a car to drive, plus a salary and all kinds of privileges. One day, she discovered he was pilfering her musical products from the store and selling them for his own gain. The hand you feed can be the very one that strangles you.
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A sililar situation, of sorts: a lady I know ran a music mart. She hired a man as a delivery driver, gave him meals and room, a car to drive, plus a salary and all kinds of privileges. One day, she discovered he was pilfering her musical products from the store and selling them for his own gain. The hand you feed can be the very one that strangles you.
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Re: 2 Candy Bars and A Bag of Chips
25th Jul 2023 1:21am
Yes.
That old saying the road to hell is paved with good intentions is true. I have helped many only to be screwed over. Now I only help animals.
Thanks for reading my blurbs I appreciate it.
That old saying the road to hell is paved with good intentions is true. I have helped many only to be screwed over. Now I only help animals.
Thanks for reading my blurbs I appreciate it.
Re. 2 Candy Bars and A Bag of Chips
28th Sep 2023 1:31pm
I found this poem in someone's reading list. It's a remarkable tale of no justice and a darker side of humanity. When people commit crimes and there's no punishment it destroys all the good when people's generosity is a smack in the face. The world is a mess and we have politicians with no backbone running the shit show.
Amazing write
RL
Amazing write
RL
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29th Sep 2023 11:06pm