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ssnakess
Tell me I'm not living
within my means.
Tell me I'm not worth
the food it takes.
Consciously be
purposely
mean
As you smile
through
gritted teeth
Slit tongue
forked long like a
snake
Tell me
more
Tell me
Tell me
within my means.
Tell me I'm not worth
the food it takes.
Consciously be
purposely
mean
As you smile
through
gritted teeth
Slit tongue
forked long like a
snake
Tell me
more
Tell me
Tell me
Published 28th Apr 2023
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29th Apr 2023 9:18pm
Hello there
I really enjoyed how the formatting of this poem makes the delivery razor sharp. I also enjoyed the metaphor here as well - how we apply this to human relationships, as well as extending that theme to jealousy, to betrayal, to all of those potent emotions.
Thank you for sharing.
-M
I really enjoyed how the formatting of this poem makes the delivery razor sharp. I also enjoyed the metaphor here as well - how we apply this to human relationships, as well as extending that theme to jealousy, to betrayal, to all of those potent emotions.
Thank you for sharing.
-M
30th Apr 2023 7:22am
