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Awoken
Sufficient inhibitions
can tease
the
fragile
mind
I ponder my existence
Hoping
to
unwind
Fascinate
my
hardened core
Colour
me
awoken
Consider me acceptable
even
when
I’m broken
can tease
the
fragile
mind
I ponder my existence
Hoping
to
unwind
Fascinate
my
hardened core
Colour
me
awoken
Consider me acceptable
even
when
I’m broken
Published 5th Apr 2023
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5th Apr 2023 2:57pm
5th Apr 2023 4:19pm
5th Apr 2023 4:41pm
Hi Everavalon,
I love your rhyme, it's natural and unforced, which is difficult to achieve.
Colour me awoken ....... brilliant.
Regards,
Gary
I love your rhyme, it's natural and unforced, which is difficult to achieve.
Colour me awoken ....... brilliant.
Regards,
Gary
6th Apr 2023 1:35am
6th Apr 2023 2:19am
6th Apr 2023 2:29am
Thanks LJ. I originally thought it was too short but I didn’t know how to add to it so I went with it. I’m glad that you liked it.
26th Aug 2024 12:59pm
I agree with Lj.
Lots to unfold through the short lines.
Thank you for the entry.
Lots to unfold through the short lines.
Thank you for the entry.
26th Aug 2024 4:03pm
