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Twelve white roses
Twelve white roses on the small cenotaph
For the man who'd seen to the terrible crash
Which had taken the life of her monstrous huband
A few years back.
Twelve white roses for Jim, who preferred men, secretly
But who loved her unconditionally
Worked for him, publishing books at Gray and Grey
In that mansion up the hill most every day.
Her jealous husband never understood
But Jim saw the bruises, knew she had troubles
Contacted friends from his turbulent past back in the 'hood
They knew how to make inconveniences disappear
Lung cancer had recently taken Jim away
The irony, for he'd never touched a cigarette in his life
So on occasion she was here to remember the good times
To tell him how she would have loved to have been his wife.
For the man who'd seen to the terrible crash
Which had taken the life of her monstrous huband
A few years back.
Twelve white roses for Jim, who preferred men, secretly
But who loved her unconditionally
Worked for him, publishing books at Gray and Grey
In that mansion up the hill most every day.
Her jealous husband never understood
But Jim saw the bruises, knew she had troubles
Contacted friends from his turbulent past back in the 'hood
They knew how to make inconveniences disappear
Lung cancer had recently taken Jim away
The irony, for he'd never touched a cigarette in his life
So on occasion she was here to remember the good times
To tell him how she would have loved to have been his wife.
Published 27th Mar 2023
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27th Mar 2023 9:23pm
Dear Viking,
This is a poignant and powerful poem that explores themes of love, loss, and redemption. The image of twelve white roses on a cenotaph creates a sense of solemnity and reverence, while the backstory of the man who helped the narrator escape from her abusive husband adds a sense of depth and complexity to the poem. The use of contrasting imagery, such as the monster of a husband and the gentle, caring Jim, creates a sense of tension and conflict that is resolved in the narrator's ultimate gratitude and love for Jim. The final lines, in which the narrator expresses her wish to have been Jim's wife, add a sense of wistfulness and regret, while also underscoring the importance of love and human connection. Overall, this is a beautifully crafted poem that uses language and imagery to convey a powerful message about the enduring nature of love and the transformative power of human connection.
Mcjay.
This is a poignant and powerful poem that explores themes of love, loss, and redemption. The image of twelve white roses on a cenotaph creates a sense of solemnity and reverence, while the backstory of the man who helped the narrator escape from her abusive husband adds a sense of depth and complexity to the poem. The use of contrasting imagery, such as the monster of a husband and the gentle, caring Jim, creates a sense of tension and conflict that is resolved in the narrator's ultimate gratitude and love for Jim. The final lines, in which the narrator expresses her wish to have been Jim's wife, add a sense of wistfulness and regret, while also underscoring the importance of love and human connection. Overall, this is a beautifully crafted poem that uses language and imagery to convey a powerful message about the enduring nature of love and the transformative power of human connection.
Mcjay.
28th Mar 2023 2:23pm
Superb analysis. I could not have written one like that. Much appreciated. Regards, Robert.
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