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Rogue Wave
The news bleats
a nonstop loop
of fearmongering
as the regularly-scheduled doom
crawls across the ocean
And I yawn.
Stretch.
Look over the snacks and
Find myself irritated
at everything.
Because it’s just
a fucking storm.
It’s a big one
but I’ve shut my eyes
through storms this big
and I’m sure I’ll be fine.
I'm sure I'll be fine through this, too.
The flooding started
and I’m curled up with a cup of
tea and a smutty book,
because I maintain the
high ground at all time,
and I’m not concerned
with being stuck on my roof,
exposed and waiting for rescue
I’m never going to need rescue.
The tornadoes started,
and I pick at a small bag of trail mix,
skipping over the peanuts,
digging for the little chocolate candies,
because the twisting wind
is on the side of the hurricane's eye
that statistically
won’t bother me much
But my skin prickled.
My palms grew clammy.
My neck flushed and I licked my lips
because suddenly my mouth was too dry
as I watching the water peel
back from the shore.
As a storm approaches over the water,
it has negative pressure
and it literally sucks in the ocean,
exposing shorelines
that have never existed.
that have never existed...
The same thing
happens with
tsunamis.
It's as if the force of nature
has to rip off the skin of the shore
and leave it naked
to be pummeled
on previously unexposed areas
And the heat ...
the heat in the water makes
it all move faster than predicted,
makes it all preternaturally strong
The ominous sight of
acres of dry land
makes my chest rattle.
Aristotle told us
nature abhors a vacuum,
and I shouldn't give a shit
about what dead Greeks think
but I see how raw the shore looks
I see how strong the swirling vortex
surrounding me has become
and how there is nothing.
nothing.
that I, in my small humanity,
can do to stop it.
And all at once,
I'm filled with mortal terror
of being
swept away
Of losing my footing
as the storm's velocity increases
under the
humid kiss of
new skies
Of standing in awe
on a final dawn as
I watch the waves
crash over me
in a new creation myth,
And I’m afraid.
Of falling
Of flailing
of watching with unglazed eyes
as the water pushes me to my back
and covers my final thoughts
with you
a nonstop loop
of fearmongering
as the regularly-scheduled doom
crawls across the ocean
And I yawn.
Stretch.
Look over the snacks and
Find myself irritated
at everything.
Because it’s just
a fucking storm.
It’s a big one
but I’ve shut my eyes
through storms this big
and I’m sure I’ll be fine.
I'm sure I'll be fine through this, too.
The flooding started
and I’m curled up with a cup of
tea and a smutty book,
because I maintain the
high ground at all time,
and I’m not concerned
with being stuck on my roof,
exposed and waiting for rescue
I’m never going to need rescue.
The tornadoes started,
and I pick at a small bag of trail mix,
skipping over the peanuts,
digging for the little chocolate candies,
because the twisting wind
is on the side of the hurricane's eye
that statistically
won’t bother me much
But my skin prickled.
My palms grew clammy.
My neck flushed and I licked my lips
because suddenly my mouth was too dry
as I watching the water peel
back from the shore.
As a storm approaches over the water,
it has negative pressure
and it literally sucks in the ocean,
exposing shorelines
that have never existed.
that have never existed...
The same thing
happens with
tsunamis.
It's as if the force of nature
has to rip off the skin of the shore
and leave it naked
to be pummeled
on previously unexposed areas
And the heat ...
the heat in the water makes
it all move faster than predicted,
makes it all preternaturally strong
The ominous sight of
acres of dry land
makes my chest rattle.
Aristotle told us
nature abhors a vacuum,
and I shouldn't give a shit
about what dead Greeks think
but I see how raw the shore looks
I see how strong the swirling vortex
surrounding me has become
and how there is nothing.
nothing.
that I, in my small humanity,
can do to stop it.
And all at once,
I'm filled with mortal terror
of being
swept away
Of losing my footing
as the storm's velocity increases
under the
humid kiss of
new skies
Of standing in awe
on a final dawn as
I watch the waves
crash over me
in a new creation myth,
And I’m afraid.
Of falling
Of flailing
of watching with unglazed eyes
as the water pushes me to my back
and covers my final thoughts
with you
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Re. Rogue Wave
15th Mar 2023 2:55am
I'm on the very edge of my seat, breathing hard. The walk from logical self assurance to WTF fear was more compelling than anything I've read in recent memory. And the ending is deeply gorgeous. What a ride.
Hope the storm passes without damage.
Hope the storm passes without damage.
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Re: Re. Rogue Wave
15th Mar 2023 2:57am
Thank you Pink, I love that you were on the edge of your seat, it's such a grand compliment and I'm all blushing and twisting the ends of my braids and shit.
Damn. Thank you! Seriously. I appreciate you, and your insight, and your enthusiastic review.
Re. Rogue Wave
15th Mar 2023 3:41am
Dear B,
Dig the metaphor of hot passion as well as the actual storm like conditions. This got me to thinking about all the things I fear but refuse to be bested by them so I push through the fear. Complaining all the way but I do it! Except when it comes to needing someone…hmmmmmmmm🤔
Might I say what a great write this is. For its twists and turns and holding your breath in anticipation of will our gal survive the next weather nightmare. Of course she will. This really was an edge of your seat read. Love those. H🌷
Dig the metaphor of hot passion as well as the actual storm like conditions. This got me to thinking about all the things I fear but refuse to be bested by them so I push through the fear. Complaining all the way but I do it! Except when it comes to needing someone…hmmmmmmmm🤔
Might I say what a great write this is. For its twists and turns and holding your breath in anticipation of will our gal survive the next weather nightmare. Of course she will. This really was an edge of your seat read. Love those. H🌷
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15th Mar 2023 2:12pm
Amen, fuck fear. I do shit that I’m afraid of because I’m afraid of it.
Except skydiving, fuck that.
You are a delight and I love your insight, as always, thank you.
Re. Rogue Wave
15th Mar 2023 11:12am
You did a great job with description in this poem. Every style of writing you do, I'm left mesmorized. Loved the ending too. 💜
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15th Mar 2023 2:13pm
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15th Mar 2023 2:22pm
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Anonymous
15th Mar 2023 2:23pm
Darling Betty (I love you like this)❤️
I followed and felt this with you.
I too have been pushed to my back but I am surely not complaining (and not in THAT way..all the way lol)
I followed and felt this with you.
I too have been pushed to my back but I am surely not complaining (and not in THAT way..all the way lol)
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Re: Re. Rogue Wave
15th Mar 2023 2:27pm
And there she is with the bait… do I take it…
Yes.
Beautiful, while you’re on your back… can I hold your… (Censored by the commission for human decency.)
Thank you Lady. I appreciate you. It’s so sucky and amazing at the same time.
Re. Rogue Wave
15th Mar 2023 2:50pm
good morning beautiful wow this was frightening and intense your descriptions of the storm were gut grabbing I felt it all in my stomach...the fear and excitement I love storms but something so unwieldly is terrorizing...your lover is a force of nature then that's really intense I read more into your subtext but won't say so here... amazing write I'm grateful you're okay ❤️
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15th Mar 2023 3:15pm
Thank you beautiful. My lover is a force of nature. Sometimes a breath of air across the nape of my neck… sometimes a tsunami. 😘
Re. Rogue Wave
15th Mar 2023 5:56pm
You're so so incredible at taking a metaphor and building upon it slowly... adding something into it that's so intimate, fresh, raw and utterly fascinating to read. Where your mind travels to and the intensity that is you on the page, it's just freaking incomparable...The brevity of strength mixed with the admitted vulnerability—that whirlwind of emotional being, is something so compelling and I think understandable to many, in our individual little ways... But of course, it's the uniquely descriptive way you poetically wield your own truth, which leads me to read and reread that magic you so wonderfully ink to the page.
I have been reading all your poems, yet I've been so busy with life and other shit to be able to leave my usual 2¢... as frustrating as that is for me... lol... I just wanted you to know the impact your writing has... It's like fuel and nutrients... I can never get enough.
I feel so lucky that you're here.... I'm sure we all do.
Thank you again, for sharing, Betty
🌹💙
xo
-B
I have been reading all your poems, yet I've been so busy with life and other shit to be able to leave my usual 2¢... as frustrating as that is for me... lol... I just wanted you to know the impact your writing has... It's like fuel and nutrients... I can never get enough.
I feel so lucky that you're here.... I'm sure we all do.
Thank you again, for sharing, Betty
🌹💙
xo
-B
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Re: Re. Rogue Wave
15th Mar 2023 6:32pm
Blue… thank you. You are water in the desert, and my lips parch just looking at your replies
Thank you my beautiful friend, for being you, and for thinking of me in such esteem.
Re. Rogue Wave
Very nice.
Fear porn is good porn
I'm of the mindset to find a spot with a nice view
Pull up a chair
Roll up a phat mother fucking joint
Watch the show , seeing the world burn
My skin melting and pustulated
What a glorious sight
Who shall rule the ashes?
Not EYE
Fear porn is good porn
I'm of the mindset to find a spot with a nice view
Pull up a chair
Roll up a phat mother fucking joint
Watch the show , seeing the world burn
My skin melting and pustulated
What a glorious sight
Who shall rule the ashes?
Not EYE
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15th Mar 2023 6:34pm
My dude all porn is good porn!
Except pooping porn. That shit is nasty, literally.
Save me a seat and pass it.
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Anonymous
16th Mar 2023 12:21pm
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16th Mar 2023 1:48pm
Actually… are you an AI?
I have to know! I’m literally dying… like Christmas morning anticipation.
I’m on the OCD spectrum and I get caught in patterns. It made me a monster as a reporter.
But I can’t help but catch the template and the modality of language, and it reads like an AI that missed one or two nuances.
I just don’t know if that’s your template or if you’re an AI… if so. Cool!!!!! I’m Betty and I prefer the term:: Metaperson as a gender.
If not, then you are a review god.
Actually, it’s all love and either way you’re a review god.
I have to know! I’m literally dying… like Christmas morning anticipation.
I’m on the OCD spectrum and I get caught in patterns. It made me a monster as a reporter.
But I can’t help but catch the template and the modality of language, and it reads like an AI that missed one or two nuances.
I just don’t know if that’s your template or if you’re an AI… if so. Cool!!!!! I’m Betty and I prefer the term:: Metaperson as a gender.
If not, then you are a review god.
Actually, it’s all love and either way you’re a review god.
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16th Mar 2023 3:31pm
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Re. Rogue Wave
17th Mar 2023 3:49am
I once went swimming in the ocean at night, at Daytona. During a storm. When under water, watching the rain pelt the surface right above you, is so cool. Because the lightning makes it look crazy!
The beach patrol shined their big light on me and yelled for me to get out. I couldn't hear them of course. But I knew I was caught. Lol.
It was insanely cool !!
Okay, this is about you, not me! Sorry!
Your imagery is perfectly drawn. The sensation of thought and mood is so well shared. We feel it.
And the ending, wow. He will sleep with so much regret, at that transfer of your heart trying to buoy itself alone.
Excellent excellent write. I ache, and tread water, with you in here.
The beach patrol shined their big light on me and yelled for me to get out. I couldn't hear them of course. But I knew I was caught. Lol.
It was insanely cool !!
Okay, this is about you, not me! Sorry!
Your imagery is perfectly drawn. The sensation of thought and mood is so well shared. We feel it.
And the ending, wow. He will sleep with so much regret, at that transfer of your heart trying to buoy itself alone.
Excellent excellent write. I ache, and tread water, with you in here.
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17th Mar 2023 7:29pm
Daytona Beach is deadly in a storm Styx. That place has those crazy rip currents. Of all of our beaches, that one scares me the most in the rain. Oh, and New Smyrna. Fucking sharks!
Thank you… I mean it. I hope there’s no regret. It is what it is, and I hope there’s nothing but good vibes and sunlit memories .. even if there’s s little twinge.
Thanks for the review.
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18th Mar 2023 12:08pm
The rip tides are the whole point. Because I don't want to die. I want proof that I can survive.
When I learned (practiced) to snorkel, it was at Smyrna. Literally under water 30 seconds I saw a fairly large shark pretty frickin close! I motioned to my brother, and we stayed below the shark and didn't move much. I was too fascinated to be scared.
When we got to shore and told our dad, he said that the shark didn't want us, we weren't even a snack yet.
When I learned (practiced) to snorkel, it was at Smyrna. Literally under water 30 seconds I saw a fairly large shark pretty frickin close! I motioned to my brother, and we stayed below the shark and didn't move much. I was too fascinated to be scared.
When we got to shore and told our dad, he said that the shark didn't want us, we weren't even a snack yet.
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Re. Rogue Wave
17th Mar 2023 5:15pm
That 1st stanza grabbed it's word hooks into me, you built up this poem from the ground up into a towering piece of presence.
LJ
LJ
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Re: Re. Rogue Wave
17th Mar 2023 7:31pm
Thank you LJ. We got hit with two hurricanes in a row last fall and … you become blase about things that could destroy you.
And that quickly becomes universal.
I’m glad you dug the read. Thank you!!!
Re. Rogue Wave
18th Mar 2023 3:03pm
For all intents and purposes, the metaphorical use here is outstanding and amazing. The cool collected patterns suddenly give way to the realization that something different is bound to happen and it will not be stopped.
Wonderful work.
Wonderful work.
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Re: Re. Rogue Wave
18th Mar 2023 9:07pm
Omg, yes! That something absolutely different is about to happen … and it’s unstoppable. You fucking nailed it. Thanks Wally.