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What Goes Unseen
It begins with the invisible work
What lies beneath?
Mentally: anxious (or is it stressed?)
Either way, I'm uncrossing these wires before things go berserk
This consciousness, a broken stream
Such messy thoughts
Don't dare open your mouth
Unless each word's placement is pristine
Deep breath in, and let it all out
Time to release the hold
What will escape?
An unintelligible shriek? a disfigured shout?
Here is where the visible work starts
Where disorganized pieces become cohesive
And fractured thoughts make art
Where what lies within comes out
And there is no longer room for the unwelcome company of doubt
Delivery, crystal clear, with a pretty sheen
This is the effort it takes to overcome
What goes unseen
What lies beneath?
Mentally: anxious (or is it stressed?)
Either way, I'm uncrossing these wires before things go berserk
This consciousness, a broken stream
Such messy thoughts
Don't dare open your mouth
Unless each word's placement is pristine
Deep breath in, and let it all out
Time to release the hold
What will escape?
An unintelligible shriek? a disfigured shout?
Here is where the visible work starts
Where disorganized pieces become cohesive
And fractured thoughts make art
Where what lies within comes out
And there is no longer room for the unwelcome company of doubt
Delivery, crystal clear, with a pretty sheen
This is the effort it takes to overcome
What goes unseen
Published 15th Jan 2023
| Edited 16th Jan 2023
Author's Note
A poem written for Madame Lavender's "Invisible and Unseen" poetry competition. 🖤
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16th Jan 2023 1:38am
This is like the buildup to writing a poem out. Yeah?
Your effort paid off, either way. Things written that make me think, are worth the write and the read.
Your effort paid off, either way. Things written that make me think, are worth the write and the read.
16th Jan 2023 1:55am
Hey Styxian,
That's one way to interpret it, for sure. The poems prompt about invisibility/the unseen inspired me to write about my experience with anxiety. This poem is supposed to represent the internal conflict of feeling anxious, while attempting to appear like I've got everything together. The prompt was a fun challenge for me to tie my feelings to.
Tierra
That's one way to interpret it, for sure. The poems prompt about invisibility/the unseen inspired me to write about my experience with anxiety. This poem is supposed to represent the internal conflict of feeling anxious, while attempting to appear like I've got everything together. The prompt was a fun challenge for me to tie my feelings to.
Tierra
16th Jan 2023 2:03am
I understand Tierra. So the anxiety is more than what i perceived as writing something out.
It's writing about living it out. Makes sense to me. Thank you for showing me.
It's writing about living it out. Makes sense to me. Thank you for showing me.
16th Jan 2023 2:14am
I feel like this would translate really well into an audio poem. The voice has clarity, authority, a sense of reflective and subtle emotional journey. It captured me.
