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Eraser
I write my days
in pencil, on paper
because I know
they’ll never last
~ ask me again
tomorrow, or Monday
after the weekend
hides behind the workday
and taunts me
with mock freedom
~ ask me again
at five-fifteen on Friday,
after the work week
hides behind my spine
and settles beneath
my tired eyes;
fair warning, ahead,
my brain spins circles
around functional ideas,
dizzying itself
between the thens and nows
perhaps my madness
waffles between the two
because I write
it all down
with an eraser in mind
in pencil, on paper
because I know
they’ll never last
~ ask me again
tomorrow, or Monday
after the weekend
hides behind the workday
and taunts me
with mock freedom
~ ask me again
at five-fifteen on Friday,
after the work week
hides behind my spine
and settles beneath
my tired eyes;
fair warning, ahead,
my brain spins circles
around functional ideas,
dizzying itself
between the thens and nows
perhaps my madness
waffles between the two
because I write
it all down
with an eraser in mind
Published 28th Dec 2022
| Edited 31st Dec 2022
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29th Dec 2022 7:40am
I love it. To take such a realistic and shadowed topic and display it so elegantly breeds beauty only you could form.
29th Dec 2022 12:27pm
29th Dec 2022 9:15am
Dear L,
Brilliant. Poignant on many levels and exceedingly relatable. I particularly appreciated the effect of the pencil erasing what might have been written. There is, for me, a moment of seeing it in print and then letting the wind take it and do whatever with it. The burden no longer being mine when that happens. Outstanding lovely write. H🌷
Brilliant. Poignant on many levels and exceedingly relatable. I particularly appreciated the effect of the pencil erasing what might have been written. There is, for me, a moment of seeing it in print and then letting the wind take it and do whatever with it. The burden no longer being mine when that happens. Outstanding lovely write. H🌷
29th Dec 2022 12:28pm
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30th Dec 2022 8:44pm
Those days seem to be on an ever-revolving loop within the big wheel of mental struggles. It helps to write, and it helps to find those who can relate. Thank you so much for reading, and for the RL 💖
1st Jan 2023 00:08am
Great write Luna. Very relatable when it comes to how we keep busy and things can change suddenly. Sometimes my mood can swing from that euphoria to a dark state I'm often wondering how did it happen.
Thanks for sharing.
Thanks for sharing.
1st Jan 2023 00:18am
14th Jan 2023 5:59pm
I love what our friends and colleagues have intuited in your writing here. To add to it, I think you create a kind of milestone avatar in the work week itself, like a hill climbed and I felt that was really unique, creative and brought across the time and weariness in a really poignant way.
15th Jan 2023 1:50am
