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ghost of a chance
the meal is
finished,
plates, silverware
and glasses cleaned
and put away in
good order,
the stars are safely
tucked away under
the blanket of night
the evening breeze
carries the bedtime
prayers of children
to God.
addiction walks beneath
the garish neon lights
of the Vegas strip
looking for a score.
winged creatures move
among the sky with
grace and ease.
all things moving
forward,
busting
through,
finding a
way
can
we?
Published 16th Dec 2022
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17th Dec 2022 3:55am
Dear BK,
There’s a painfulness to this that is gripping and relatable. As though I’m dancing alone and very tempted to pick up old habits. Haunting and excellent write. H🌷
There’s a painfulness to this that is gripping and relatable. As though I’m dancing alone and very tempted to pick up old habits. Haunting and excellent write. H🌷
17th Dec 2022 12:47pm
17th Dec 2022 2:15pm
17th Dec 2022 4:08pm
As a species we almost like staying stuck, regardless of what we say out loud.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
17th Dec 2022 7:48pm
Great write.
"all things moving
forward," ...
... that includes us, even if it sometimes does not look or feel like it. (at least, that's how I prefer to frame it)
"all things moving
forward," ...
... that includes us, even if it sometimes does not look or feel like it. (at least, that's how I prefer to frame it)
17th Dec 2022 7:57pm
To become "unstuck." The process of becoming...moving forward. That is the task of being healthy.
Thank you, Josh.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
Thank you, Josh.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
17th Dec 2022 9:08pm
There is something about the chaos and order in the universe that meshes well in this piece.
Lovely piece bk.
Lovely piece bk.
17th Dec 2022 9:12pm
18th Dec 2022 10:31pm
It's poignant and sad, but beautifully written. I really like the contrast, especially with the innocent:
"the evening breeze
carries the bedtime
prayers of children
to God."
"the evening breeze
carries the bedtime
prayers of children
to God."
18th Dec 2022 10:34pm
