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As We Lay
Love.
Lust.
Fuel my desire.
Her divine aroma
Sets my senses on fire.
Taking me higher.
Don’t want to come down.
On a mission to explore her.
Ecstasy bound.
Lips so soft and sweet
As they become one with mine.
So wet and luscious.
Inhibitions left behind.
My tongue searches
For her delectable essence.
Probing deeper and deeper.
I just might keep her
Entangled in the web of my arms.
Holding her captive,
But she don’t want to be free.
Together blissfully.
As we lay.
Published 4th Nov 2022
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- Edited 8th Dec 2022 2:45pm
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6th Nov 2022 6:27pm
4th Nov 2022 6:28pm
Hoi hoi
Lovely celebration of all that’s beautiful between two people.
I’ve enjoyed reading the poem.
Thank you.
Kind regards, Gus
Lovely celebration of all that’s beautiful between two people.
I’ve enjoyed reading the poem.
Thank you.
Kind regards, Gus
6th Nov 2022 6:28pm
4th Nov 2022 6:29pm
6th Nov 2022 6:29pm
4th Nov 2022 7:07pm
Echo Jilted Johnny's comment "celebration of all that's beautiful between two people".
6th Nov 2022 6:30pm
5th Nov 2022 1:02pm
Love it all!
A great rhythmic build up in the first verse
then a slight slowing down of the tempo
as if pausing for thought and the delivery of
of a devastating aside " I just might keep her "
A big big turn on (for me) it's just gotta do well
in the comp!
A great rhythmic build up in the first verse
then a slight slowing down of the tempo
as if pausing for thought and the delivery of
of a devastating aside " I just might keep her "
A big big turn on (for me) it's just gotta do well
in the comp!
6th Nov 2022 6:42pm
If this poem is a turn on in any way, then my job is done😉 Thank you so much for reading and commenting! :)
25th Nov 2022 7:57pm
16th Dec 2022 8:45pm
12th Dec 2022 4:08pm
16th Dec 2022 8:46pm
3rd Feb 2023 8:34pm
Hoi hoi
The amounts of listeners to our cooperations is now estimated at 1.200
And we are getting nice compliments on my repost.
Check it for yourself, and I hope it’s a source of inspiration for your lyrics/poetry writing too!!
À very cool cooperation if you ask me!
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/465859-as-we-lay---a-cooperation-with-miss-tess/
Have a wonderful weekend!
Kind regards, Gus;
