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enchanted
come unto me oh seers
tell me true does he yet love?
in the silent storm I query
gentleness says yes
in my sacred heart I am stumbled
it hurts to be this aware
I seek him in the strobe light of destruction
a scarred terrain is his inner sanctum
bloody redemption, it is so
I scry great intelligence
a madman aye
I look on the horizon and I spy shadows
gathering and plotting
a pivotal moment my understanding of this man
I look to him in my solemn eye
we blink in unison
he is my elder in this vision
I lust him in the adulterated need
I crave his greed
he is the want of me
Published 2nd Aug 2022
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This is dark and delicious and full of longing. He sounds like an interesting person! However (possibly irrelevantly), this line just slapped me hard around the head:
'it hurts to be this aware'
Isn't that the truth in so many areas of life?
The more we educate ourselves about domestic and global issues, the more frightening they can seem. When you're highly intelligent, it can make you acutely aware of problems in the workplace. And as a sensitive introvert, it's all too easy to see things that others miss... too much for one's own good sometimes.
Really enjoyed.
'it hurts to be this aware'
Isn't that the truth in so many areas of life?
The more we educate ourselves about domestic and global issues, the more frightening they can seem. When you're highly intelligent, it can make you acutely aware of problems in the workplace. And as a sensitive introvert, it's all too easy to see things that others miss... too much for one's own good sometimes.
Really enjoyed.
2nd Aug 2022 3:38am
"I seek him in the strobe light of destruction" has a great vivid visual effect. I like how you mix the dark and romantic really well.
Brilliant.
Brilliant.
2nd Aug 2022 4:33am
it hurts to be this aware....
One great one liner after another....
I would like to hear this one read.....
One great one liner after another....
I would like to hear this one read.....
2nd Aug 2022 4:12pm
Like Wally said it's dark and romantic, a combination that is always beautiful to me. Trying to determine if it's love or just lust can be a difficult equation. 'it hurts to be this aware' I know I always notice everything; I am super perceptive and able to see the bigger picture even when I don't want to, even here. The strobe light of destruction is a line that definitely casts a vivid imagery that really immerses me into the words. It seems the shadows of our past, present, and future are always gathering and plotting creating a sinister plan. Needing his lust and greed is just a beginning of something more. Which path that leads down might be yet to be determined. Sometimes love and passion go in different directions, others they merge. When they merge it can be truly spectacular. I really loved this.
