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She Saved Me
adrenaline dumps
past time of the primitive
where the lizard brain drains thought
shapes reason with two options
fight or flee
me
I always chose to fight
revelled in the might
fists on flesh
a surge that makes the
brain purge itself
drunks
punks
skaters
I didn't care
I wasn't scared
I would fight anyone
a mad pitbull fully trained
giving no fucks
fought a giant
6ft 11
420 pounds
still remember the sound
of his head hitting asphalt
and my assault continued
until he couldn't
what woke me
going home to my daughter
eye black
ribs cracked
barstool to the back
boot to the head
three men vs me
they went to hospital
I wore blood as a first place trophy
I hissed when she tried to kiss
my swollen cheek
growling in anger
a split second
I nearly bit my own
flesh and blood
I quit that day
when you say I’m the best
daddy ever
I buoy with silent pride
proud to not be
dead
in jail
or some semblance of the shadow that
stands behind my every
trained instinct
past time of the primitive
where the lizard brain drains thought
shapes reason with two options
fight or flee
me
I always chose to fight
revelled in the might
fists on flesh
a surge that makes the
brain purge itself
drunks
punks
skaters
I didn't care
I wasn't scared
I would fight anyone
a mad pitbull fully trained
giving no fucks
fought a giant
6ft 11
420 pounds
still remember the sound
of his head hitting asphalt
and my assault continued
until he couldn't
what woke me
going home to my daughter
eye black
ribs cracked
barstool to the back
boot to the head
three men vs me
they went to hospital
I wore blood as a first place trophy
I hissed when she tried to kiss
my swollen cheek
growling in anger
a split second
I nearly bit my own
flesh and blood
I quit that day
when you say I’m the best
daddy ever
I buoy with silent pride
proud to not be
dead
in jail
or some semblance of the shadow that
stands behind my every
trained instinct
Published 4th Jul 2022
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you know I always gave my dad credit for holding down a job and making sure I was protected he had a big anger issue but I always felt sorry for anyone who crossed him...he managed to stay out of jail too for me I think...in the end a car accident took him I miss him very much you guys are making me cry today and that's something I don't usually do... great and powerful write...
17th Jul 2022 11:39am
I’m glad you had that with your dad, fathers are strange things, I’ve never had a good one, but there’s still something intrinsic in the human animal that wants a father
4th Jul 2022 10:00pm
when you say I’m the best
daddy ever
I buoy with silent pride
proud to not be
dead
in jail
or some semblance of the shadow that
stands behind my every
trained instinct
"or some semblance of the shadow"
Absolutely breathtaking.
The end was fucking stunning. The awareness that you actively work to not be what shaped you, the self discovery and the sense that there is something beyond just self... gorgeous.
daddy ever
I buoy with silent pride
proud to not be
dead
in jail
or some semblance of the shadow that
stands behind my every
trained instinct
"or some semblance of the shadow"
Absolutely breathtaking.
The end was fucking stunning. The awareness that you actively work to not be what shaped you, the self discovery and the sense that there is something beyond just self... gorgeous.
17th Jul 2022 11:41am
I do the best I can with what I’ve got, still fuck up a million times a day, but I do the best I can.
It’s always work to try not to be the broken pieces from our past,
It’s always work to try not to be the broken pieces from our past,
4th Jul 2022 10:20pm
What I really like about the ending of this is the unexpected person switch. Through most of the poem you're telling the story to anyone in the room. Then, at the end, it's like you're turning to your daughter to speak directly to her, with all that love and pride, to let her know what she's meant to your life. It takes the broader story and immediately brings it to such a beautiful, personal intimacy. It's just incredibly touching.
17th Jul 2022 11:43am
I’m glad you picked up on that, I tried to work it hard that way
I’d like her to read these all someday and realise what a profound life impact her tiny prescience had on me
I’d like her to read these all someday and realise what a profound life impact her tiny prescience had on me
