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Rum Ocean
rum ocean
still
no emotion
soon
heaving and throwing
up on the waves of life
empty bottle or ship?
sailing or floating?
drinking all the waters in
until completely dry
an open wasteland
where all the sea creatures die
........memories
of a harpooned mind................
still
no emotion
soon
heaving and throwing
up on the waves of life
empty bottle or ship?
sailing or floating?
drinking all the waters in
until completely dry
an open wasteland
where all the sea creatures die
........memories
of a harpooned mind................
Published 30th Jun 2022
Author's Note
another introspective piece
© CanisInk-Untis 2022
© CanisInk-Untis 2022
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1st Jul 2022 00:09am
This is really clever CIU.
All the back and forth.
Decisions deciding - finally revealing a harpooned mind.
Brilliant!!!
All the back and forth.
Decisions deciding - finally revealing a harpooned mind.
Brilliant!!!
1st Jul 2022 2:36am
thanks miss A
I thought rather than stereotyped ship in a bottle,
why not make the bottle of alcohol the ship itself?
and instead of pouring out, drinking everything in?
thanks again for the LA and your welcome appreciation
-CIU
I thought rather than stereotyped ship in a bottle,
why not make the bottle of alcohol the ship itself?
and instead of pouring out, drinking everything in?
thanks again for the LA and your welcome appreciation
-CIU
5th Jul 2022 5:14pm
Ah rum with the taste of coconut that you can lick from between the peak of knees. Heaving and throwing, pushing into the surf. Sailing into the storm... It's a rough ride and you won't be dry anytime soon. Killing mermaids with a harpoon. Shooting deep inside... but the song goes on...
6th Jul 2022 3:29am
that is well fleshed out response, because my between kneepeaks very needs it,
and you know how I like to do bad things to those mermaids.........:)
and you know how I like to do bad things to those mermaids.........:)
