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Want
I want I to run my fingers through your hair
Brush it back, cupping your cheek, so soft, within my palm
Lightly pressing my thumb against your lips
Just for a moment, before leaning in for a kiss
I want to taste you, to breathe your breath
Talk forgotten, time now timeless
So close to you pressed
In stolen moments made memories forever
Brush it back, cupping your cheek, so soft, within my palm
Lightly pressing my thumb against your lips
Just for a moment, before leaning in for a kiss
I want to taste you, to breathe your breath
Talk forgotten, time now timeless
So close to you pressed
In stolen moments made memories forever
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Re. Want
18th Jun 2022 8:16am
I'm lost within the gentle touch of your words, AJ.
Thank you for sharing with us, it's a treat to have you return.
🌹 - B
Thank you for sharing with us, it's a treat to have you return.
🌹 - B
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Re: Re. Want
18th Jun 2022 11:32pm
Re. Want
18th Jun 2022 9:03am
This is a lovely little piece of romantic seduction, with the want of simple, meaningful intimacy.
I do have a bit of critique for it. Specifically on "cupping" and "pressing" where "cup" and "press" would fall better in line with "run" and "brush" to keep more a sense of in the moment, the immediacy of want in the piece.
Thanks for this sweet retreat of a moment. :-)
I do have a bit of critique for it. Specifically on "cupping" and "pressing" where "cup" and "press" would fall better in line with "run" and "brush" to keep more a sense of in the moment, the immediacy of want in the piece.
Thanks for this sweet retreat of a moment. :-)
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Re. Want
2nd Jul 2022 3:36pm
You grabbed me from the first line, I love fingers run through my hair. ;) This is such a tender, sensual, and beautiful kiss creating vivid images of that moment in my head. Pressing together and making those memories we live for. Love it!
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