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Bring to Naught My Bones
I never liked to sleep alone
but there wasn't room
in his ivory bed
for a woman like me,
the other ghosts had slept there
much longer than I.
He kept the closet doors shut tight
so the voices weren't as loud
and couldn't understand
why the reflections
in the black of my eyes
always made him small.
If I could find the things I've left behind
I wouldn't want 'em back
I buried those bones a long time ago...
but there wasn't room
in his ivory bed
for a woman like me,
the other ghosts had slept there
much longer than I.
He kept the closet doors shut tight
so the voices weren't as loud
and couldn't understand
why the reflections
in the black of my eyes
always made him small.
If I could find the things I've left behind
I wouldn't want 'em back
I buried those bones a long time ago...
Published 16th Jun 2022
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Anonymous
16th Jun 2022 10:26pm
why the reflections
in the black of my eyes
always made him small.
Stunning imagery, a literal image and a metaphor in the same,
And a brilliant close….
How there aren’t comments is beyond me.
in the black of my eyes
always made him small.
Stunning imagery, a literal image and a metaphor in the same,
And a brilliant close….
How there aren’t comments is beyond me.
17th Jun 2022 6:09pm
Thank you so much
for taking the time
to leave a few words, I think the amazing feedback
keeps us going.
for taking the time
to leave a few words, I think the amazing feedback
keeps us going.
Sometimes finding a good way to articulate one's self with worthy feedback feels intimidating when there's not a thing out of place in a piece of work like this beauty.(at least to my uneducated eye) I read this earlier today and have been struggling to find the right words...
Gaps is beyond correct....I too, think comments should be a scrolling down the page. It's always strange the way things work out here on DUP...it's a conundrum.
For me, this piece is haunting and it physically made me suck in my breath, in it's sheer effectiveness and impact....
Thank you for your return to publishing your poems here, I feel very fortunate to get another chance at experiencing them.
Warm regards,
🌹 - B
Gaps is beyond correct....I too, think comments should be a scrolling down the page. It's always strange the way things work out here on DUP...it's a conundrum.
For me, this piece is haunting and it physically made me suck in my breath, in it's sheer effectiveness and impact....
Thank you for your return to publishing your poems here, I feel very fortunate to get another chance at experiencing them.
Warm regards,
🌹 - B
17th Jun 2022 6:21pm
Hands down, one of the most refreshingly honest comments, I thank you for it and understand that crazy lack of words that happens when you read something that gives you the feels. I'm so guilty of it, lol.
My uneducated eyes are both flattered by your lovely words kind lady!
My uneducated eyes are both flattered by your lovely words kind lady!
21st Jul 2022 7:41am
Ok, the second poem of yours I’ve read and about all I have to say is I’m just feeling grateful for the gift. Ty. It’s late where I am and I was feeling a little down and then suddenly there you were with two two two gorgeous poems.
I agree with the comment above that marvels at the lack of comments on your stunning creativity. Makes me feel like the few comments I get place me by default in some sublime company, although I am not in any way in your league. Be still my ancient heart!
I agree with the comment above that marvels at the lack of comments on your stunning creativity. Makes me feel like the few comments I get place me by default in some sublime company, although I am not in any way in your league. Be still my ancient heart!
21st Jul 2022 11:05pm
Well thank you Mrd, so kind of you to leave
such a wonderful comment!
Flattered and amused, 'In my leage,'...lol
And thanks for the RL
such a wonderful comment!
Flattered and amused, 'In my leage,'...lol
And thanks for the RL
