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Fuck You
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My ragged hands
press against cold tin
powder-coat scrapings under my nails
searing with lust
bass in my head
is low and seedy
dive-bar-corruption
burning alcohol
as it torches its way
down
I want to growl words in your ear
make you
moan in your mouth
thrum to the acoustic
vibrations as they rumble
from my forked tongue
taste your arousal
bathe in it
till all I can smell
is you getting off on me
getting off on you
a pretty picture laced in cyanide
feel you buckle against me
a mortar shockwave
cup your tits in my palms
make you arch your back
so I can punish your insides
gasping breath
painting delicate fog in the cold night air
two dogs rutting
in an alley
cold air bites your nipples
My ragged hands
press against cold tin
powder-coat scrapings under my nails
searing with lust
bass in my head
is low and seedy
dive-bar-corruption
burning alcohol
as it torches its way
down
I want to growl words in your ear
make you
moan in your mouth
thrum to the acoustic
vibrations as they rumble
from my forked tongue
taste your arousal
bathe in it
till all I can smell
is you getting off on me
getting off on you
a pretty picture laced in cyanide
feel you buckle against me
a mortar shockwave
cup your tits in my palms
make you arch your back
so I can punish your insides
gasping breath
painting delicate fog in the cold night air
two dogs rutting
in an alley
cold air bites your nipples
Published 13th Jun 2022
| Edited 14th Jun 2022
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13th Jun 2022 7:43am
Hoi hoi
A great example of a raw picture doesn’t need raw language.
I like this kind of power very much!
Thank you!
Kind regards, Gus
A great example of a raw picture doesn’t need raw language.
I like this kind of power very much!
Thank you!
Kind regards, Gus
13th Jun 2022 11:14pm
Thanks for the stop by and comment,
Sometimes figurative language is as good if not better than statement,
Always got told show don’t tell,
So I try.
Sometimes figurative language is as good if not better than statement,
Always got told show don’t tell,
So I try.
14th Jun 2022 7:51am
Hoi hoi
I agree with that show don’t tell very much.
Plus I think the best ones are those, you can read aloud in the vicinity of little children.
If they are comforted (and play on) by the stream of words while grown ups listen to the lyrics while getting another message, that’s wonderful too.
I hope I may share a trick with you that I learned about only yesterday?
If you post your lyrics, there’s a small section at/on the bottom in which you can type a short explanation about what motivated you to write it. (You see I struggle with a language my mum didn’t teach me).
If you paste the link to your music there, your readers can click it and it will be easier accessible. Audience friendly (smiley).
Keep ‘em coming!
Kind regards, Gus
I agree with that show don’t tell very much.
Plus I think the best ones are those, you can read aloud in the vicinity of little children.
If they are comforted (and play on) by the stream of words while grown ups listen to the lyrics while getting another message, that’s wonderful too.
I hope I may share a trick with you that I learned about only yesterday?
If you post your lyrics, there’s a small section at/on the bottom in which you can type a short explanation about what motivated you to write it. (You see I struggle with a language my mum didn’t teach me).
If you paste the link to your music there, your readers can click it and it will be easier accessible. Audience friendly (smiley).
Keep ‘em coming!
Kind regards, Gus
The back-alley-against-the-wall fuck, damn.. just DAY-am.
Amazing allusion:
getting off on me
getting off on you
I wish I had time to pick the apart line smoking line. It’s exquisite. You combined all of your rhetorical metal, per se, into one explosion piece
Amazing allusion:
getting off on me
getting off on you
I wish I had time to pick the apart line smoking line. It’s exquisite. You combined all of your rhetorical metal, per se, into one explosion piece
