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pity the whore
watering down my moonshine desire in my hopeless state
my hunger withers
I see with eyes of vision
while he lusts for freedom with another
it breaks me when he reaches for me
because I know he's reaching for the past fire that doesn't exist
I won't connect with a liar
I won't play out assault of affections on my body
it's clear to me he's fucking around
securing his future before he makes his final exit
he has like a vampire sucked my youth
leaving me void of feeling
I burn inside and come undone on the outside
perhaps he wishes to leave me with nothing
my youthful years invested, wasted
my tears exchanged for my love of him
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Re. pity the whore
24th May 2022 10:13pm
Omg ! This is so direct and fierce we always know don’t we. Fuck him! You’re better off. You may not see that now but once it happens and a chain reaction starts, follow the links to a new life
you will get through this Brenda you have support up and down dup babygirl
Hang in there love ❤️
Always your sister
10 years baby!!!
you will get through this Brenda you have support up and down dup babygirl
Hang in there love ❤️
Always your sister
10 years baby!!!
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Re: Re. pity the whore
24th May 2022 11:38pm
hello beautiful Jackie I hope I'm wrong of course and I might be in any case I deeply appreciate the support and sistership you've given me over the years ❤️ thank you love you lady...
Re. pity the whore
25th May 2022 11:10am
Dear B,
This poem reaches deep into my soul.
I’ve been staring at my own sentence for over ten minutes trying to express everything spinning in my head about this poem but I’m stuck. This piece resonates on every level for me. The pain and frustration…”securing his future before he makes his final exit” how many times I’ve thought this very thing. Amazing, raw, honest and everything in between of a write! Xx
H🌷
This poem reaches deep into my soul.
I’ve been staring at my own sentence for over ten minutes trying to express everything spinning in my head about this poem but I’m stuck. This piece resonates on every level for me. The pain and frustration…”securing his future before he makes his final exit” how many times I’ve thought this very thing. Amazing, raw, honest and everything in between of a write! Xx
H🌷
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Re: Re. pity the whore
26th May 2022 00:14am
hello beautiful Honoria I hate feeling this way and it could just be my own insecurities coming to the surface and it hurts to think I might deserve this... thank you I'm sorry this resonates with you too... I deeply appreciate the support 💕
Re. pity the whore
25th May 2022 11:38am
I have a friend who was dating this guy...
She wanted to marry him...
He left her and informed her he was with someone else...
(but like in a lame cowardly way...)
Now he says he made a mistake...
I want to burn his whole world down... Within my self...
I don't know if she will go back to him...
Tis such a personal thing...
Nevertheless...
I do not like seeing people I care about
go through such things...
Just wanting to send you some energies
from the depths of me...
She wanted to marry him...
He left her and informed her he was with someone else...
(but like in a lame cowardly way...)
Now he says he made a mistake...
I want to burn his whole world down... Within my self...
I don't know if she will go back to him...
Tis such a personal thing...
Nevertheless...
I do not like seeing people I care about
go through such things...
Just wanting to send you some energies
from the depths of me...
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Re: Re. pity the whore
26th May 2022 00:16am
hello dearest Cipher thank you for reading and commenting I feel for your friend who is hurting...that's terrible and can really do a number on your self esteem...I would crumble I think if this were to happen... he has always been somewhat discreet with his dalliances...I hate feeling this way I'm no angel... I deeply appreciate the support ❤️
Re. pity the whore
Anonymous
25th May 2022 2:36pm
Hi Crimson,love this bittersweet pen.
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Re: Re. pity the whore
26th May 2022 00:17am
thank you graciously dearest Wired for the support on this write it makes me feel bad I think this way sometimes 💕
Re: Re. pity the whore
Anonymous
26th May 2022 10:39am
Hi Crimsin,how are you?
It is what it is,try not 2 feel bad.
Its transient.
X
It is what it is,try not 2 feel bad.
Its transient.
X
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Re. pity the whore
2nd Jun 2022 6:40am
She was once a mirrored reflection of myself....once....and only once. love you <3
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Re. pity the whore
6th Jul 2022 7:41pm
Damn, this is some doses of harsh truth and yet showing how fragile it can be. It's a tale that happens all too often, but knowing deep down inside must be so difficult.
I hope you find your way and listen to your instincts. No one can make you happy more than you but you. Thank you sharing thought, this is one of those writes that I reflect back on and realize how emotionally profound they can be.
I hope you find your way and listen to your instincts. No one can make you happy more than you but you. Thank you sharing thought, this is one of those writes that I reflect back on and realize how emotionally profound they can be.
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Re: Re. pity the whore
6th Jul 2022 11:56pm
hello dearest Wally life is like that isn't it? we can't force a feeling nor should you try...I don't really have clear answers as my heart is still invested...it will hurt terribly if I lose my friend to another thank you for understanding me 💕