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Tetanus
I want to paint
(you)
while I fuck
him.
I want to shove a
rusted
screwdriver
into your side as
I drive down on
him,
and become
entranced by the
crimson line
coruscating
along
that beautiful
curve of your body.
so that it's
tetanus
clenching your body
and locking
your
mind
instead of you,
(you)
clenching my body
and
rotting
my
soul.
I want to paint you.
I want to leave outlines
of you on the sheets.
(you)
while I fuck
him.
I want to shove a
rusted
screwdriver
into your side as
I drive down on
him,
and become
entranced by the
crimson line
coruscating
along
that beautiful
curve of your body.
so that it's
tetanus
clenching your body
and locking
your
mind
instead of you,
(you)
clenching my body
and
rotting
my
soul.
I want to paint you.
I want to leave outlines
of you on the sheets.
Published 18th May 2022
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I know that I'm this complete stranger - just fyi, I randomly came across your poems here on DUP months and months ago and sincerely fell insanely hard for them. I've read them several times because they are some of the best reads here, hands down. So, I'm beyond excited to see that you've returned. You're the poetic diamond in the rough, Betty...and one of the big reasons I've remained participating on DUP, secretly hoping that maybe, juuust maaaybe I'd get the chance to read new poems from you. (can't believe I am) I always found it so hard to know how much I missed out on, not finding DU until 2020....Not finding the kind of fucking stellar writing that you create until 2021.... so excuse my possible excessive 'rabidness'... I swear lm not crazy only a serious fan-girl.... lol.
This new piece feels like you're picking up right where you left off... It's so open, raw, brave and utterly fantastic— driving home that sensation of boundless lust, with the 'nail and hammer' .. of each keystroke...
I cannot wait to read more, please know that I'll certainly not be the only one who feels as such...
Welcome back ;)
... and nice to meet you.
🌹-B
This new piece feels like you're picking up right where you left off... It's so open, raw, brave and utterly fantastic— driving home that sensation of boundless lust, with the 'nail and hammer' .. of each keystroke...
I cannot wait to read more, please know that I'll certainly not be the only one who feels as such...
Welcome back ;)
... and nice to meet you.
🌹-B
29th May 2022 7:43pm
Fuck, we can't be friends if you aren't crazy.
Also? Now I'm afraid I'll have performance anxiety? What'll happen if I get poetic whisky-dick? Will you still love me? Will you tell me it happens to everyone... :)
But seriously, thanks for the love, Blue, I appreciate it.
Also? Now I'm afraid I'll have performance anxiety? What'll happen if I get poetic whisky-dick? Will you still love me? Will you tell me it happens to everyone... :)
But seriously, thanks for the love, Blue, I appreciate it.
18th May 2022 6:10am
Betty...you haven't changed a bit, you incredible pillar of fire.
that intensity bubbling over into aggression is such a primal, built-in thing -- reminds me of something I read about human reaction to babies, old ladies wanting to pinch their cheeks, squish them, and practically shouting they "just want to eat them up" in their intensity.
I know it's not the stabbing that's necessarily the point, but that wanting and almost desperation to catch this beauty is hanging on all these little stanzas.
nice to see you, welcome home
that intensity bubbling over into aggression is such a primal, built-in thing -- reminds me of something I read about human reaction to babies, old ladies wanting to pinch their cheeks, squish them, and practically shouting they "just want to eat them up" in their intensity.
I know it's not the stabbing that's necessarily the point, but that wanting and almost desperation to catch this beauty is hanging on all these little stanzas.
nice to see you, welcome home
29th May 2022 7:45pm
JESTA! Good hell, woman, damn fine to see you!
Change is overrated.
Thanks for the insight. I love the way you always catch me when I think maybe nobody caught me... the desperation is always clawing around somewhere. Thanks, lovely!
Change is overrated.
Thanks for the insight. I love the way you always catch me when I think maybe nobody caught me... the desperation is always clawing around somewhere. Thanks, lovely!
29th May 2022 7:39pm
Anonymous
24th May 2022 4:10am
The use of the title, and the screwdriver tie this piece together and splatter it in blood,
Thinking of penetrating someone at the same time as yourself, the dichotomy of agony and pleasure
Intense and resounding as if your you want to kill the lust for this other person is the same as wanting to kill them
Thinking of penetrating someone at the same time as yourself, the dichotomy of agony and pleasure
Intense and resounding as if your you want to kill the lust for this other person is the same as wanting to kill them
29th May 2022 7:46pm
Good hell, gaps! You hit the nail on the head.
Wanting to kill the lust feels as vicious, as desperate, as wanting to kill a person.
Thanks for the r/r
Wanting to kill the lust feels as vicious, as desperate, as wanting to kill a person.
Thanks for the r/r
