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PASSING NOTES
PASSING NOTES
You're damn right you're my writing brother
We've each got a desk right next to each other
in the back there, in creative writing class
where I'm mooning the world while slapping my ass
Oh sweet sister, (I kissed her while we were alone
one morning at midnight, in a different time zone)
Keep adjusting your panties in fantasies
as you blokes keep adjusting your scrotes
and forever never cease to be-------------------
-----PASSING NOTES____
You're damn right you're my writing brother
We've each got a desk right next to each other
in the back there, in creative writing class
where I'm mooning the world while slapping my ass
Oh sweet sister, (I kissed her while we were alone
one morning at midnight, in a different time zone)
Keep adjusting your panties in fantasies
as you blokes keep adjusting your scrotes
and forever never cease to be-------------------
-----PASSING NOTES____
Published 13th May 2022
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13th May 2022 8:53am
13th May 2022 9:16am
Interesting classroom ideas worthy of investing more of your time on, perhaps?
Could the penultimate line be improved?
As long as you know what you're talking about that's really all that matters.
~ Abra
Could the penultimate line be improved?
As long as you know what you're talking about that's really all that matters.
~ Abra
13th May 2022 9:20am
I agree with Abra,
It's powerful and potent, Archie.
Your poetic voice is strong and clear and if others don't understand, that's ok because you do, which is all that matters.
I enjoyed the rhyming flow and the conviction of your character.... always!
Keep at it, my friend!
🌹 - B
It's powerful and potent, Archie.
Your poetic voice is strong and clear and if others don't understand, that's ok because you do, which is all that matters.
I enjoyed the rhyming flow and the conviction of your character.... always!
Keep at it, my friend!
🌹 - B
13th May 2022 3:43pm
14th May 2022 11:21am
15th May 2022 4:19pm
That feels so good and real that I want to say it again....
I WILL KEEP WRITING WHATEVEVER THE FUCK I WANT TO SAY
I WILL KEEP WRITING WHATEVEVER THE FUCK I WANT TO SAY
15th May 2022 4:27pm
19th May 2022 8:29pm
I'm not asking for anyone's fucking approval. I already know what the fuck I'm doing
19th May 2022 8:43pm
