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her.
I saw an old wheelchair, dusty
forgotten in the corner
of an even older thrift store.
Lost in imagination, I saw her
pull it next to my front window,
a giant, ego-shaped blot
in the view of my glorious sun.
She scratches her shitty sketches
of my wind chimes, turning
to ask almost wistfully, on a sigh.
Why, should she have an Etsy store?
All with legs held downward,
as if she’s a 1920’s starlet, having
dramatically lost the use of her legs.
forgotten in the corner
of an even older thrift store.
Lost in imagination, I saw her
pull it next to my front window,
a giant, ego-shaped blot
in the view of my glorious sun.
She scratches her shitty sketches
of my wind chimes, turning
to ask almost wistfully, on a sigh.
Why, should she have an Etsy store?
All with legs held downward,
as if she’s a 1920’s starlet, having
dramatically lost the use of her legs.
Published 4th Apr 2022
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Unresolved emotions tend to surface in dreams to reveal what needs be healed. This also indicates a lack of understanding, i.e. - the question, as though referencing perhaps a dementia of sorts. The final stanza reminded me of the old movie, Sunset Blvd.
This is a very descriptive piece, Luna. And a very worthy submission. You're doing excellently this year despite the recent circumstances in your life that could've held you back.
This is a very descriptive piece, Luna. And a very worthy submission. You're doing excellently this year despite the recent circumstances in your life that could've held you back.
Dear L,
What I really found very intriguing is the use of the wheelchair and the illusion of the person in the chair. For me, the undercurrent of anger and disappointment in unresolved pain of the dreamer and detachment of the person in the chair wonderfully depicts human interaction of those we love and love to hate at the same time. Excellent write. H🌷
What I really found very intriguing is the use of the wheelchair and the illusion of the person in the chair. For me, the undercurrent of anger and disappointment in unresolved pain of the dreamer and detachment of the person in the chair wonderfully depicts human interaction of those we love and love to hate at the same time. Excellent write. H🌷
4th Apr 2022 3:55am
"She scratches her shitty sketches"
Is my favorite line. It invokes so much depth. Depth, like a memory foam mattress imprint. A bed, with one beautiful pillow.
Is my favorite line. It invokes so much depth. Depth, like a memory foam mattress imprint. A bed, with one beautiful pillow.
5th Apr 2022 11:08am
This is so powerful… forces me to look deeper into this picture, n’ yea her “shitty” sketches. 😊👍🏿✌🏾
22nd May 2022 12:53pm
Sometimes it's the unexpected things that take us back. I loved the imagery and the journey your imagination took you on.
31st May 2022 6:45pm
The description of both the scenery and emotion are eloquent and sharp. You transferred the photograph into words perfectly.
31st May 2022 8:00pm
