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Cocoon
From a deep cocoon, protrudes
the wet beginning of a butterfly
But a nub at first,
as curious as I
I coax it to come
I whisper close
my lips brush the fine hairs
moistening it, as it
offers moisture back
-Kisses me back
all natural, how
It's wings swell, between my lips
It wants to soar
yet pinned by my tongue
Fluttering, it glistens
over its own softness
Seeking to explore
our pruned gardens
I fall back, grasping tight
Butterfly comes forth
pouring over my shoulders
as I shiver into
this new skin
My hands, like a mantis,
As I'm devouring, savoring
initially morsels,
into a mouthful
Hunger sated by nectar
I give some back;
Taste this
Butterfly sensating, wriggling
legs trapping my face
This creature of life
lets me live, as I
suck, and then for breath
I stab it back
into its cocoon
I follow too
inches at a time
more than enough
It flails for mercy
then for no mercy
I feel it as it flies
over me, taking me
to its deepest high
Clenching at my girth,
as it floods over me
As I'm sinking but floating
and falling and flying
as it thrashes around me
Like some kind of meat eating
butterfly.
Published 27th Feb 2022
Author's Note
Went out last night, grounded myself tonight. Wrote this.
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27th Feb 2022 3:35am
27th Feb 2022 4:44am
27th Feb 2022 4:39am
Ohhh my my my!! .... The juicy delicious metaphors are a cornucopia of imaginative passion which whets my own appetite. The dizzying hunger increases with each stanza as the densely felt desire swirls heady... I swear I can almost smell and taste the subtle flavor of what I'm certain would be pure ambrosia...
Yum. ;)
What an incredibly enticing and provocatively sexy read, my dear Styxian. I was fantastically taken in and rapt, lost within your words.
Damn, how I love that feeling... so...
Whew!!! 🚬🥃
🌹-💙
xo
B
Yum. ;)
What an incredibly enticing and provocatively sexy read, my dear Styxian. I was fantastically taken in and rapt, lost within your words.
Damn, how I love that feeling... so...
Whew!!! 🚬🥃
🌹-💙
xo
B
27th Feb 2022 5:04am
Well now, we have that in common? We both like the taste of "ambrosia"?
Hey, do you know what two or more "butterflies" are called? "Insex".
I really need to go to sleep now. Lol.
I'm glad that you enjoyed the plethora of metaphors that I imposed upon such a graphic scene! I'm working on another (hopefully better) short story, but needed to take a break and write something spontaneous and "uplifting".
I love your reply!
Hey, do you know what two or more "butterflies" are called? "Insex".
I really need to go to sleep now. Lol.
I'm glad that you enjoyed the plethora of metaphors that I imposed upon such a graphic scene! I'm working on another (hopefully better) short story, but needed to take a break and write something spontaneous and "uplifting".
I love your reply!
27th Feb 2022 11:53am
Dear S,
Sheesh! Where did you go out and get inspiration like this? You have a natural and very tasteful manner in writing sizzle. I really appreciate that. It allows the reader to spin off in their own direction and that can be so liberating. Terrific write. H🌷
Sheesh! Where did you go out and get inspiration like this? You have a natural and very tasteful manner in writing sizzle. I really appreciate that. It allows the reader to spin off in their own direction and that can be so liberating. Terrific write. H🌷
27th Feb 2022 2:33pm
You know how they remake old movies, and rehash TV shows? Writing is the same way, and actually to a grander scale. We've all lived the scenes, yet as writers we try to change the perspectives, change the ambience, and so forth.
Even with a partner, each has its merits that motivate us to some degree. I've long outgrown the purely physical instincts. It's too basic. I want inside their thoughts, what makes them tick. That's what I will take with me.
Everyone is a story.
Even with a partner, each has its merits that motivate us to some degree. I've long outgrown the purely physical instincts. It's too basic. I want inside their thoughts, what makes them tick. That's what I will take with me.
Everyone is a story.
Hey Styx
I'm with Honoria. Sheesh!!!
Oh my, quite the erotic innuendo through the whole thing. The metaphor thermometer was
off the chart!! I think I heard it break in the background while reading.
I'm taking a gulp of ice water at the
moment. Okay, I'm back:) This is just freaking awesome!!!
All in great taste. Each word pulled me to the next.
Cheers to meat eating butterflies!!!
Love that:)
I'm with Honoria. Sheesh!!!
Oh my, quite the erotic innuendo through the whole thing. The metaphor thermometer was
off the chart!! I think I heard it break in the background while reading.
I'm taking a gulp of ice water at the
moment. Okay, I'm back:) This is just freaking awesome!!!
All in great taste. Each word pulled me to the next.
Cheers to meat eating butterflies!!!
Love that:)
28th Feb 2022 3:01am
Lol. What a hoot, your reply! I'm actually snickering out loud.
I started out with just a thought of a butterfly barely emerging from it's cocoon. And obviously it reminded me of that " little man in the boat".
(I wonder how many have never heard that term? LOL)
But who the hell wants to write about a "him". What guy goes down on a woman and says "hey dude" to that little nubby magic thingie?
Besides, it's more like a canoe, not a boat. If it's at boat status, it's probably had too many passengers...
So, cocoon, butterfly, bingo!
I started out with just a thought of a butterfly barely emerging from it's cocoon. And obviously it reminded me of that " little man in the boat".
(I wonder how many have never heard that term? LOL)
But who the hell wants to write about a "him". What guy goes down on a woman and says "hey dude" to that little nubby magic thingie?
Besides, it's more like a canoe, not a boat. If it's at boat status, it's probably had too many passengers...
So, cocoon, butterfly, bingo!
Yes. the little man in
a canoe comes out
to play!
The metaphors are
powerfully suggestive.
Some great illustrations
here engraving pictures
inside my mind. Stroke
my mind. Stroking!
"stabbing it back"
Very Compelling!.
hmm, I might read this again
somewhere quiet
It might conjure up
some white water
rafting with a little man
I know to come out
to play .... he can punt
my canoe around
Just saying, is all
a canoe comes out
to play!
The metaphors are
powerfully suggestive.
Some great illustrations
here engraving pictures
inside my mind. Stroke
my mind. Stroking!
"stabbing it back"
Very Compelling!.
hmm, I might read this again
somewhere quiet
It might conjure up
some white water
rafting with a little man
I know to come out
to play .... he can punt
my canoe around
Just saying, is all
9th Oct 2022 4:40pm
Well dang, Rew, you went back a bit for this one! Hang on, let me stretch. It's been awhile!
I don't remember much now, the conversation going on in here about this particular subject. I added my version is all. Like many things, this too has an art to it. That should be mastered. Ahem. But at least the eagerness can make up for the novice!
-What a cool, inspiring comment, btw. Artistry is compelling as hell. I like being uplifted by talent.
I don't remember much now, the conversation going on in here about this particular subject. I added my version is all. Like many things, this too has an art to it. That should be mastered. Ahem. But at least the eagerness can make up for the novice!
-What a cool, inspiring comment, btw. Artistry is compelling as hell. I like being uplifted by talent.
