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Dancing Now With You - Daughter's Poem
He was just a boy with the body of a man
and saw me as a girl wishing to be woman.
As he held me I thought of the years of nights
I’d danced before my mirror with imaginary men.
They were kind and giving and knew how to please me.
I left them all that night for that boy with the body of a man.
I knew his love would last, so real and full of longing.
But, he drifted on to another girl, as little boys must do.
Wouldn’t he be surprised to see me dancing now with you?
and saw me as a girl wishing to be woman.
As he held me I thought of the years of nights
I’d danced before my mirror with imaginary men.
They were kind and giving and knew how to please me.
I left them all that night for that boy with the body of a man.
I knew his love would last, so real and full of longing.
But, he drifted on to another girl, as little boys must do.
Wouldn’t he be surprised to see me dancing now with you?
Published 19th Feb 2022
| Edited 13th Mar 2023
Author's Note
Another poem by my daughter reminded me of my own desires to become a woman. We edited it together. That will be a special memory. She alludes to a new love interest in the last line. I'm sure it's the younger boy she's begun dating. Again, she wants to include her photo.
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19th Feb 2022 4:43pm
Your daughters work is very good, please pass on my praise
Great write awesome read
Love and light
Ron xx
Great write awesome read
Love and light
Ron xx
19th Feb 2022 8:32pm
20th Feb 2022 3:44am
This is a beautiful team with fresh spirit and enthusiasm on the fire of passion and share, care and write and play with words together. I am sure you both must be luckiest one. I love her words and inner most feelings.
Love,
KS
Love,
KS
20th Feb 2022 11:43am
9th May 2022 11:44am
The first lines stood out for rhyme, reading aloud to myself:
He was just a boy with the body of a man
And he saw in me a girl wishing to be woman
He was just a boy with the body of a man
And he saw in me a girl wishing to be woman
31st Aug 2022 5:33pm
Your choices of photographs is quite good and impactful on its own.
It's very artistic.
You have a knack for choosing the appropriate images to go with your poems.
It's very artistic.
You have a knack for choosing the appropriate images to go with your poems.
