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Our sun
Our sun
Our faithful sun
A tear in this galaxy
The light that let us all be
And never shall you run
Our sun
An abstract orb
Many faces you present
We stand in awe with our heads bent
Your gifts, we do absorb
Our sun
Our most fearsome
A swell too much
We burn to dust
When will the day not come?
Our sun
The sacred fire
Are you the God
That time forgot?
Burnt the prayers, ignored the quire?
Our sun
A lonesome sun
Are you the widow of the dark?
Your very creation created heart
Your love can never be won
Our faithful sun
A tear in this galaxy
The light that let us all be
And never shall you run
Our sun
An abstract orb
Many faces you present
We stand in awe with our heads bent
Your gifts, we do absorb
Our sun
Our most fearsome
A swell too much
We burn to dust
When will the day not come?
Our sun
The sacred fire
Are you the God
That time forgot?
Burnt the prayers, ignored the quire?
Our sun
A lonesome sun
Are you the widow of the dark?
Your very creation created heart
Your love can never be won
Published 7th Mar 2012
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7th Mar 2012 11:42pm
MrAlptraum, good read: the sun will always be there shining down at us in total indifference. We may end up in its bosom someday though. Hopefully not in our lifetime though,eh?
8th Mar 2012 9:41am
Hopefully not until my bloodline is gone Grace haha.
Thanks for the kind words!
Thanks for the kind words!
8th Mar 2012 7:25pm
8th Mar 2012 7:50pm
8th Apr 2012 12:37pm
I personally liked the repetition, it emphasises and draws the reader back to the point, which seems to a questioning ode to the sun.
A nice speculative poem. :)
A nice speculative poem. :)
8th Apr 2012 1:09pm
Why thank you Miss indie. I thought of doing another for the moon, but never got to it for some reason.
Glad you liked it.
Glad you liked it.
