Butterflies

I have been treating
myself to varied spankings
from dates recently.

None of them made the  
grade, alas; so my bum is
for it come new year.

And you are right - vulgar language is not needed to make the erotic sensual - the implicit can be as enticing as the explicit

Negotiating while wet and/or swollen may place you at a disadvantage....unless you like that sort of thing.

I do rather like
being disadvantaged: it
makes the wet wetter

That, My Sweet Friend, is a slick trick.

Properly worded to arouse and contemplate a plan of action

Spectacular

BIG LIKE

I'll do it very
improperly next time so
you can judge the change

hullo

nicely put, Lady : premise, thought chain, expression. I thought your rhyme scheme was decent enough, that's to say nothing screamed forced.

I thought there were minor discrepancies with syllable counts. not that I was counting, more of a feel if that makes sense. which wouldn't ordinarily be a major thing but at times if there is a commitment to a scheme or feel or flow they might come into play a little.  ..which you probably  already know, in which case I do opologize :),


you show a lot of versatility in your writings. it's a good trait.

anyhow, good stuff

rhyme scheme is iambic pentameter - 10 syllables per line - correctly stressed throughout with enjambments as needed - it's often called the Shakespearian Sonnet form.    
 
I agree the content could be improved and will be with time, but the rhyme scheme is just as it should be.  Maybe you might study the form a little more and try writing some yourself.   I'd be interested to see what you achieve.
 
I try to be versatile (so thanks for that comment) in that the submissive perspective is far more than the monotone of men who describe it too often on women's behalf

Enjoy orgasmic bliss all night and morning long.

I will try to when
my bottom is less sore from
my christmas lap times

I deliver to order: clothed or bare;

is 11 syllables. there's only supposed to be 10. I didn't study it but felt it all the same. this is mostly the reason hardly anybody give honest critique anymore.

I'm sorry to have Irked you. I came here because you pop into my poetry now n again and I appreciate it.

*hat tip*

the ed in clothed is silent, so I don't think it affects the rhyme scheme unless pronounced clothéd - which would feel archaic and odd.

It is nice to be challenged even if I will defend my corner - without any animosity - it is good to have the debate and it's the only way to get better - I asked for full feedback and it was kind of you to give it.

I like your verses - it's nice to have your views too

*curtseys*

funny enough, it was only after I posted the comment I figured the -ed could be silent.

I worked with a Romainian for a while, he pronounced every -ed. even words like walked. it was amusing and interesting at the same time

I pronounced the -ed automatically in my head and like you say it felt a bit odd.

I am truly happy to have been schooled on meter and indeed the Shakespeare's sonnet, and thank you for your time.

*hat tip*

I like formal meter and maybe use it as a cover for lack of content that would be exposed in blank verse.  It's nice to experiment and to test one's limits - I really should do this more.