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His Pleasure
finger nails softly scratched
the palm of his hand
coloured scarlet
teardrops
dancing on his senses
he stared at the redness
of her painted nails
on his white palm
he swallowed
as he felt his desire rise
inside his belly
she gazed into his eye
her eyes dark with desire
he shivered
and leaned over to claim her lips
he took her
mouth hungry on hers
giving her his pleasure
pleasure he gave and brought away
Dawn lit her beautiful face
cold and white as alabaster
folded hands demure between her breasts
deep puncture on her neck
the palm of his hand
coloured scarlet
teardrops
dancing on his senses
he stared at the redness
of her painted nails
on his white palm
he swallowed
as he felt his desire rise
inside his belly
she gazed into his eye
her eyes dark with desire
he shivered
and leaned over to claim her lips
he took her
mouth hungry on hers
giving her his pleasure
pleasure he gave and brought away
Dawn lit her beautiful face
cold and white as alabaster
folded hands demure between her breasts
deep puncture on her neck
Published 19th Nov 2021
Author's Note
Thoughts about nocturnal unsolved crimes
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19th Nov 2021 2:48pm
I loved this!! Especially how the poem was completely steeped in gentle eroticism and then POW! the total twist ending of that last stanza, such wonderful poetic gold! Absolutely awesome!! A crime story right up my alley, Grace.... To me it leaves the reader to bask within that surprise turn of events, a cliffhanger of sorts, allowing for so much thought provoking ....A mind reels, wondering what happened next.... or better yet, how did she end up there?....just a couple of many thoughts!
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Really entertaining and creative ink!
I thoroughly enjoyed reading :)
🌹 - B
x
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Really entertaining and creative ink!
I thoroughly enjoyed reading :)
🌹 - B
x
19th Nov 2021 8:30pm
I was thinking about lovers in the night, one not knowing the other except for that one desire. Afterwards can be either or...and a third eventuality...death of the spirit and at times body. vampirism can be translated or applied to life in many ways. Thanks dear Blue for reading 🌹
19th Nov 2021 7:17pm
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19th Nov 2021 8:34pm
19th Nov 2021 8:37pm
Hi there thank you for dropping by and reading as well as commenting. I'm glad you like it. Thanks😄
19th Nov 2021 10:57pm
I felt the chills, sensual ones. Not knowing whether or not it was intended but the allusion to vampirism was a novel touch. None more erotic than vampires,. Grace, you can "bite me" on my neck if you will. Only if you are prepared to claim your nocturnal delight. 😍 This!
20th Nov 2021 11:00pm
I often wonder about necks lips and teeth, you know. The act sensuous but can also be dangerous. Isn't it? Thanks for being here MrM.
