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Breathing space
Breathing space
written November 3rd, 2021
Space stretches
into the distance
I send my breath
towards you
soft like a breeze
tickling your hair
embracing you
pooling around you
making this space
for you
to be
to rest
to feel peace
a breathing space.
written November 3rd, 2021
Space stretches
into the distance
I send my breath
towards you
soft like a breeze
tickling your hair
embracing you
pooling around you
making this space
for you
to be
to rest
to feel peace
a breathing space.
Published 4th Nov 2021
Author's Note
I used to make collages years ago from magazine clippings. Luckily magazines still exist lol. The collage came first, and then the poem.
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4th Nov 2021 9:19pm
Touching write, senid 😌 I used to make collages back in the day, and am definitely guilty of hoarding a box of old magazines incase the inspiration strikes again! I like the layering effect you used on this one.
7th Nov 2021 2:24pm
Thank you! It is nice to have the supplies there in case the urge hits. Thank you for reading me and commenting.
Anonymous
4th Nov 2021 10:32pm
What I enjoy--
the skillful & pleasing handling of the rhythm--
effective line breaks--
the idea of peaceful feelings--
Very under-rated!
Enjoyed!
the skillful & pleasing handling of the rhythm--
effective line breaks--
the idea of peaceful feelings--
Very under-rated!
Enjoyed!
7th Nov 2021 2:25pm
Thank you. It hardly seems worth commenting on to me. Thank you for reading and thinking and taking the time to comment. it means a lot to me.
7th Nov 2021 8:12pm
8th Nov 2021 2:12pm
