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The heavenly alchemy of Hippcampi
The long and short of it ...
I want to hear you
And keep it for myself
Use my whip
To have you learn the lesson
Well
On your knees
And the rest ...
Dogs howl.
Jealous in their bite
A grip like sinking teeth
A grip like a merciless hereafter
I want to hear you
And keep it for myself
Use my whip
To have you learn the lesson
Well
On your knees
And the rest ...
Dogs howl.
Jealous in their bite
A grip like sinking teeth
A grip like a merciless hereafter
Published 28th Sep 2021
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Anonymous
28th Sep 2021 9:24am
This is very interesting--
The title with the variation of Hippocampus, which is something I've seen you do before, I believe, the word-morphing, drew me to the poem.
Then there's the issue of the "you," and the aggressively needful feminine voice--
It's not the voice of a person, so much as a kind of ghost of an interface, if that makes sense, a haunted and abandoned interface, meant to facilitate communication across a boundary. And the interface has become derelict, abandoned, haunted. Mad.
Interesting,
Enjoyed!
The title with the variation of Hippocampus, which is something I've seen you do before, I believe, the word-morphing, drew me to the poem.
Then there's the issue of the "you," and the aggressively needful feminine voice--
It's not the voice of a person, so much as a kind of ghost of an interface, if that makes sense, a haunted and abandoned interface, meant to facilitate communication across a boundary. And the interface has become derelict, abandoned, haunted. Mad.
Interesting,
Enjoyed!
1st Oct 2021 3:09am
Gin, this was white-hot erotic flame. You focused your female energy in such a way as to make your needs imperative to the man who is the focus of your desire. I loved the darkly playful rhythm you made and your signature lyrical command of poetry. None does it better than you my friend. And that is a lesson I'll never forget.
XoXoXo
John
XoXoXo
John
1st Oct 2021 3:36pm
So powerful, definitely has a BDSM feel to me. The Dominatrix expressing and fulfilling her needs. I think he will learn some things. ;) This definitely has a lot of bite to it.
17th Oct 2021 2:38pm
