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Symbiote
Ownership
of
the means
of
Production
Stellar machine & the art of process.
Pieces put together by invisible gremlins.
Workshop fluidity – Piece by piece.
Placed into conveyor delivery systems.
Reabsorbed into the main frame.
Compelling further production methods.
Sending biology into space/time.
A point somewhere in horizontal monads.
Symbiote of itself as a mystery.
Self unto it’s Self triggering in unawareness.
Free will is questionable verily.
Parasitic usurpation meanders consciousness.
Production
of
the means
of
Ownership
Published 28th Jul 2021
Author's Note
The thought occurred to me that the mind is a potentially a parasite unto itself... (A very strange realization.) Perhaps like the source and estuary/ocean of a river, as well as the hydrologic cycle of the self...
Honestly, I find the entire structure of a river to be a form of consciousness.
Honestly, I find the entire structure of a river to be a form of consciousness.
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Anonymous
28th Jul 2021 11:30am
I can relate to this in the context of talking about a river...kind of.
Honest critique: I like the topic, & what you're trying to get it, more than I do the execution, where I often get lost / feel un-grounded in the extended metaphor. An example: the 4 lines, beginning with 2 past particples, and then 2 gerunds, all of them without something to anchor themselves to
Placed into conveyor delivery systems.
Reabsorbed into the main frame.
Compelling further production methods.
Sending biology into space/time.
I'm wanting to know what exactly you're referring to--thoughts? emotions? sensory perceptions? I don't know...
Still, I enjoyed reading.
Honest critique: I like the topic, & what you're trying to get it, more than I do the execution, where I often get lost / feel un-grounded in the extended metaphor. An example: the 4 lines, beginning with 2 past particples, and then 2 gerunds, all of them without something to anchor themselves to
Placed into conveyor delivery systems.
Reabsorbed into the main frame.
Compelling further production methods.
Sending biology into space/time.
I'm wanting to know what exactly you're referring to--thoughts? emotions? sensory perceptions? I don't know...
Still, I enjoyed reading.
29th Jul 2021 9:00am
Thank you so much, Mark, for your thought provoking and honest critique... I greatly appreciate you taking the time to do so.
Yes... I absolutely see what you are saying. I think I enjoy leaving spaces for the reader to dwell and perhaps blossom forth, in individualized ways, also, as a writer, this approach is conducive to self exploration and growth, to me. (I do know that this is a tricky proposition.) Oh... And the target audience... (another interesting conversation.)
While I do appreciate more classical based execution, I also enjoy more experimental approaches. (actually, I always preferred the experimental.)
Your commentary gives me things to consider, in different ways. That is very cool.
I like your comments very much.
Yes... I absolutely see what you are saying. I think I enjoy leaving spaces for the reader to dwell and perhaps blossom forth, in individualized ways, also, as a writer, this approach is conducive to self exploration and growth, to me. (I do know that this is a tricky proposition.) Oh... And the target audience... (another interesting conversation.)
While I do appreciate more classical based execution, I also enjoy more experimental approaches. (actually, I always preferred the experimental.)
Your commentary gives me things to consider, in different ways. That is very cool.
I like your comments very much.
28th Jul 2021 2:49pm
I love the circular beginning & end... much to ponder here! (Although I relate those words more to society as a whole than to individual minds.)
But... is it a parasite, or a symbiote? Or, maybe that's the question.... one is benevolent & cooperative, the other is destructive.... personally, my mind can be both. Hmm...
Thanks for itching my brain this morning!
k
But... is it a parasite, or a symbiote? Or, maybe that's the question.... one is benevolent & cooperative, the other is destructive.... personally, my mind can be both. Hmm...
Thanks for itching my brain this morning!
k
29th Jul 2021 9:03am
That is such an awesome observation K. Thank you so much... I think it is a symbiote, until it is not. You know? It was a pretty startling "insight" that I received in this matter... I am going to explore this further.
Oh... Extending this to society... That is very cool. YEs.. I think most things or perhaps all things extend into most or all spheres, in the language of the philosophical/poetical. Therefore, you must be poetical/philosophical and... I must very much like that about you.
You are super cool.
Oh... Extending this to society... That is very cool. YEs.. I think most things or perhaps all things extend into most or all spheres, in the language of the philosophical/poetical. Therefore, you must be poetical/philosophical and... I must very much like that about you.
You are super cool.
