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Distilled Souls
Does not creation rejoice as our flesh becomes one? Should we not accept the pleasures of this tentative existence absent of shame?
The Great Spirits of Earth distill our souls into fragrant oils for touching. Let us celebrate the animal desires so often misplaced in favor of human decency. As evening falls, run naked with me toward the orange sun, wishing for one more hour of life.
In our few remaining days, we’ll not be judged by what we did but the things we left undone. And so my temporal love, let us leave nothing undone.
The Great Spirits of Earth distill our souls into fragrant oils for touching. Let us celebrate the animal desires so often misplaced in favor of human decency. As evening falls, run naked with me toward the orange sun, wishing for one more hour of life.
In our few remaining days, we’ll not be judged by what we did but the things we left undone. And so my temporal love, let us leave nothing undone.
Published 25th Jul 2021
| Edited 26th Jul 2021
Author's Note
This couple will leave nothing undone. With thanks to paperstains for the inspiration. https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/425366-whisper-to-a-roar/
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25th Jul 2021 12:53pm
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25th Jul 2021 1:28pm
Yes. Sacred and to be enjoyed whether in long term relationship (which can be beautiful) or temporal (which can also be lovely). I suppose it's all temporal in the grand scheme of things. Thanks for reading.
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25th Jul 2021 1:59pm
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25th Jul 2021 2:05pm
Beautiful thought that even the most casual of unions might have an eternal and sacred quality. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
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25th Jul 2021 2:29pm
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25th Jul 2021 4:16pm
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25th Jul 2021 11:15pm
I really like this, and touched that it was sparked by something I wrote. It was a nice choice using 'live' instead of 'light' when running towards the sun. The overall feeling of it is quite lovely.
One little hiccup I want to mention is here: misplaced in favor human decency. This seems to be missing an "of" after favor. I was also wondering if "to" instead of "in" might be a good choice here.
Enjoyed this, and thank you for your kind words :-)
One little hiccup I want to mention is here: misplaced in favor human decency. This seems to be missing an "of" after favor. I was also wondering if "to" instead of "in" might be a good choice here.
Enjoyed this, and thank you for your kind words :-)
26th Jul 2021 2:23am
Thank you for catching the missing "of." I still might think about the meaning here because I don't want it to seem like it's "either or."
It is so nice when the words of another poet influence mine. I admire your writing.
It is so nice when the words of another poet influence mine. I admire your writing.
26th Jul 2021 7:03am
I can see what you mean about the either/or connotations of that. Perhaps, instead of decency, something along the lines of propriety, if you're thinking of a change. Similar, depending on usage, but propriety leans a little more toward societal expectation in my mind. Just something I was pondering.
I enjoy being inspired by others, too, and the pieces that come out of it can be so different than anything one might write on their own. Thanks again. :-)
I enjoy being inspired by others, too, and the pieces that come out of it can be so different than anything one might write on their own. Thanks again. :-)
