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Shades of a Sunset
Hot molten red
like the lips of a forbidden lover
Deep orange
as if morning will never come
Yellow bolts from the earth
like lightening form your eyes
warm winds rush through me as I watch the shades of our sunset
while you kiss me passionately
like the lips of a forbidden lover
Deep orange
as if morning will never come
Yellow bolts from the earth
like lightening form your eyes
warm winds rush through me as I watch the shades of our sunset
while you kiss me passionately
Published 15th Jul 2021
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Anonymous
15th Jul 2021 8:29am
The sunset is vividly described, and the description of the sunset lets us understand the relationship of the 2 lovers.
The warm winds--sunset in summer. Wind can also signal spiritual energy / presences.
Beautiful line conflating the lines of the sun stretching over the curve of the horizon with the eyes of "you"--
Here's the question: the ending seems off-putting. While he's kissing her passionately, she's apparently looking at the sunset. Her attention is elsewhere. Makes me wonder about how involved she is with him.
The warm winds--sunset in summer. Wind can also signal spiritual energy / presences.
Beautiful line conflating the lines of the sun stretching over the curve of the horizon with the eyes of "you"--
Here's the question: the ending seems off-putting. While he's kissing her passionately, she's apparently looking at the sunset. Her attention is elsewhere. Makes me wonder about how involved she is with him.
15th Jul 2021 2:31pm
15th Jul 2021 11:34pm
hello beautiful Mysterious One
very romantic in the telling
it's electric I felt enthralled while reading💕
very romantic in the telling
it's electric I felt enthralled while reading💕
Anonymous
- Edited 13th Oct 2021 11:45pm
4th Oct 2021 11:48pm
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