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Body in Rebellion
...it’s a funny thing
when the body rebels
against its owner,
arms and legs
wildly changing course
unexpectedly pushing
when you mean to pull,
and letting go
when you mean to hold on;
against intended direction,
legs get the signal to move
a millisecond too late
and suddenly, there is no more
assurance of your capability;
it’s only the moment when
you realize your limbs
now have a mind
of their own
that you begin to wonder
what you could have done
with them
when they were still loyal
to you
when the body rebels
against its owner,
arms and legs
wildly changing course
unexpectedly pushing
when you mean to pull,
and letting go
when you mean to hold on;
against intended direction,
legs get the signal to move
a millisecond too late
and suddenly, there is no more
assurance of your capability;
it’s only the moment when
you realize your limbs
now have a mind
of their own
that you begin to wonder
what you could have done
with them
when they were still loyal
to you
Published 28th Apr 2021
Author's Note
NaPo 2021 64 unique words. A little gripe about my MS, which had me stumbling over my feet all day today grrr.
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28th Apr 2021 6:11am
I feel you woman! Old age sucks! Great expression
Luna. Its almost over 😅
Hugs
Jackie ♥️
Luna. Its almost over 😅
Hugs
Jackie ♥️
28th Apr 2021 6:15am
28th Apr 2021 6:22am
Dear L,
Oh I am sorry to read this and this is sure to be little to no consolation but you write about this so exquisitely. There is a frustrated elegance you manage to put across like no one else can. Had this been my write I’d have had to put that warning clause on it for all the foul language I could write and my ending would have been my middle finger. I appreciated the reflection along side of the reality in this poem. I found myself thinking of my own former self and wishing I’d have taken more advantage. I so love your raw honesty in this write. H🌷
Oh I am sorry to read this and this is sure to be little to no consolation but you write about this so exquisitely. There is a frustrated elegance you manage to put across like no one else can. Had this been my write I’d have had to put that warning clause on it for all the foul language I could write and my ending would have been my middle finger. I appreciated the reflection along side of the reality in this poem. I found myself thinking of my own former self and wishing I’d have taken more advantage. I so love your raw honesty in this write. H🌷
4th May 2021 4:35pm
I feel you about the middle fingers and curses! Thank you so much, Honoria 💜
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4th May 2021 4:36pm
28th Apr 2021 11:49pm
I truly felt this one, Luna. Much love to you and strength for your willpower to overcome. xo
4th May 2021 4:36pm
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4th May 2021 6:05am
good lord, this is a great read on what happens when the parts of us turn against each other and its now got me curious about the systemics of MS thanks for this pre bed thought provoker
4th May 2021 4:38pm
26th Jun 2021 6:52pm
Amazing write Luna. Hope you are doing OK. You really put things in perspective when you pour these beautiful spills.
