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Deux-Sevres
I dreamt about France again
You were waiting in the garden;
a man at peace
Your gaze uninterrupted
as smoke leaked and ash dropped
Were you contemplating the ripeness of the plums or your inner beast?
I did not disturb you
I just looked on from the side
The overwhelming relief
that you were there
stopped me from calling out
Or was it the knowing that this dream was not real? That I could not hide?
I wished to look into your eyes
Hear your voice
See your smile
But I knew if you saw me and I saw you, you would know the pain I feel and the loss you created
That’s why this dream is mine
I’ll watch you from the patio
and stare more for a while
You were waiting in the garden;
a man at peace
Your gaze uninterrupted
as smoke leaked and ash dropped
Were you contemplating the ripeness of the plums or your inner beast?
I did not disturb you
I just looked on from the side
The overwhelming relief
that you were there
stopped me from calling out
Or was it the knowing that this dream was not real? That I could not hide?
I wished to look into your eyes
Hear your voice
See your smile
But I knew if you saw me and I saw you, you would know the pain I feel and the loss you created
That’s why this dream is mine
I’ll watch you from the patio
and stare more for a while
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27th Sep 2021 00:12am
The intensity and depth of feeling is incredibly powerful, in my opinion. To be able to capture that sense of desire, need and implicit want, in such away that makes a reader's heart beat faster, hands sweat in an empathic rush of kinship.... is rare and such unmitigated talent.
I am disappointed in myself for not finding your work earlier....
I hope you are motivated and continue to publish poems here.... I feel that I am totally morphing into a huge fan...
Such fantastic ink-
🌹 - 💙
B
I am disappointed in myself for not finding your work earlier....
I hope you are motivated and continue to publish poems here.... I feel that I am totally morphing into a huge fan...
Such fantastic ink-
🌹 - 💙
B
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27th Sep 2021 9:22pm
Hi Bluevelvete,
I'm honestly taken by your comments ❤️ the kindness of your words has hugely brightened my day!
Thank you for reading and passing on your positive energy.
L 🌺
I'm honestly taken by your comments ❤️ the kindness of your words has hugely brightened my day!
Thank you for reading and passing on your positive energy.
L 🌺
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Re. Deux-Sevres
6th Oct 2021 00:09am
There's a strong possibility of ending up in that country in the future when it visits you in a dream.
It's like there is something that still needs to happen.
Well, how is France these days?
Hopefully, not too mad at Australia.
It's like there is something that still needs to happen.
Well, how is France these days?
Hopefully, not too mad at Australia.
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1st Jan 2022 5:49pm
As one who associates volcanoes with certain French colonies like Martinique (heard of Mont Pelee, suffered like ancient Pompeii) rather than France itself, I would think such a dream a nightmare.
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13th Feb 2022 1:18pm
dear MW
i like the drifting Gauloises clouds that inundate the ambiance of Deux-Sèvres & the realm of dreaming
a warm smile
silent lotus
i like the drifting Gauloises clouds that inundate the ambiance of Deux-Sèvres & the realm of dreaming
a warm smile
silent lotus
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31st Dec 2024 3:24pm
Sorry I'm late to the party. Two rivers indeed. We dream, sometimes lucidly, but at length one finds life is a waking dream. Nicely snatched from the ether and shared 🌼
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