Dizzy (excerpt)

U cant direct message me?

??

Top left corner. Little envelope...

Then go to the bar.i don't care what u drink. Sheesh

It was an analogy...

Mkay, I did put that I was open to honest critique... So are you saying too many alcohol references?

Noted.

Can’t say it won’t happen again. I guess my style just isn’t for you.

What the fuck.

Ok what's windows down? ...speeding around? Bitch, I got no wheels. With all the other crap I read  wow uve been so busy writing up a storm.  . Go to sleep.

I... what??? Who even are you I feel like you think this is to you or something

I don’t know you and you are being so super rude please leave me alone

Fuck you and all your other profiles. You’ve ruined this for me, I just wanted to read and share some fucking poetry... you bastard.

Again, I enjoyed the presentation of the poem for it's construction.

I'm a big pushover for poems that flow smoothly regardless of the content, (well to some degree).

Nice writing.

Yes this was a few lines out of the whole piece, my favorite part probably, but I can see how it would lack content. I’ve been hesitant to really put myself out there and this (sharing work) is really scary to me. Your messages have been inspiring and I’m gonna just put a whole piece up. Hecklers be damned;)

I should have said subject matter in place of content. :-)))

MADD  would not like that attitude.......

It wasn’t about drunk driving or drinking even... it’s about going through the motions of life and finding a breath of fresh air. I can see how taken literally it would seem that way...
Drowning in a pool of whiskey craving vodka tonic means having so much of the same that it feels suffocating and longing for something different.

The subtle rhyme scheme in this gave it a really nice flow as I read through this little piece. Hecklers aside, I thought this was a very valid little piece of writing.

Thank you for sharing.

-M